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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. The tendency of news reports in the media to focus more on problems and emergencies rather than on positive developments is harmful to the individuals and the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

The tendency of news reports in the media to focus more on problems and emergencies than on positive developments is harm to the individuals and the society as a whole. v. 2
These days nearly all people see news and news seems to focus on issues and sad events more than good ones. So, some people think that harmful for us and that effect on us as a community. While others believe that news does not has effect on people. I will discuss both sides in this essay and will draw my personal conclusion. In one hand, they, the individuals who believe in this idea, say that news does not effect on us. And they say that the world is like that more sad event happened than good ones. For example, if you have 10 pieces of news and one of them is the sad one, it will has more coverage and impact. Because we are like tell sad news more. So, that's why some think that is the nature of news and it does not effect on us. On the other hand, there are people say that we are effecting by bad news more news really change us. To illustrate, some scientists do some researchs and they say that the news defintely on people psychologically. Also, they say that a lot of thing make the news more effective like voice tone of the narrative, photos show with news, the title, presentation ways and music. All of these things effect on the power of the news. Hence the belief that news have actual impact on us. In addition, as I mentioned before, the sad news seems to be more popular and spreading quickly. For an instance, we are actually in our daily life have more sad news to tell and that is an human nature. This proves clearly that the media focus more on sad events and that effect ones. In conclusion, after a careful analysis of both point views. I believe that the news are really effect on us and the nature of us is to tell more sad news than others.
These days
nearly
all
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see
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and
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seems to focus on issues and
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sad
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events
more than
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good
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ones
.
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,
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some
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think
that harmful for us and that
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effect
on us as a community.
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While
others believe that
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news
does not
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has
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effect
on
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people
. I will discuss both sides in this essay and will draw my personal conclusion.

In one hand, they, the individuals who believe in this
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idea
, say that
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news
does not
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effect
on us. And they say that the world is like that more
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sad
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event
happened than
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good
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ones
.
For example
, if you have 10 pieces of
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news
and one of them is the
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sad
one, it will
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has
more coverage and impact.
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Because
we are like
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tell
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sad
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news
more.
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So
, that's why
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some
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think
that is
the nature of
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and it does not
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effect
on us.

On the other hand
, there are
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people
say that we are effecting by
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bad
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news
more
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news
really
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change
us. To illustrate,
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some
scientists do
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some
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researchs and
they say that the
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news
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defintely
on
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people
psychologically
.
Also
, they say that
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a lot of thing
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make
the
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news
more effective like voice tone of the narrative, photos
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show
with
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news
, the title, presentation ways and music. All of these things
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effect
on the power of the
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news
.
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Hence
the belief that
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have actual impact on us.

In addition
, as I mentioned
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before
, the
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sad
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news
seems to be more popular and spreading
quickly
. For an instance, we are actually in our daily life have more
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sad
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news
to
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tell
and
that is
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an
human nature. This proves
clearly
that the media focus more on
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sad
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events
and that
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effect
ones.

In conclusion
, after a careful analysis of both point views. I believe that the
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news
are
really
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effect
on us and the nature of us is to
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tell
more
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sad
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news
than others.
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IELTS essay The tendency of news reports in the media to focus more on problems and emergencies rather than on positive developments is harmful to the individuals and the society as a whole.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
321 words
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