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The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in the popularity of fashion clothes and consumers goods. To what extent do you agree. v.1

The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in the popularity of fashion clothes and consumers goods. v. 1
It is true that adopting fashionable clothes and consumers goods are growing trend among people. They tend to imitate each other, which depict the growing popularity of fashionable clothes and consumer items. I completely agree with this statement. The primary reason for imitating other human being is because of inspiration. In other words, people get inspire from the appealing outfits of a certain person and they want to copy it. They assume that, if they wear those modern outfits they would be able to groom their personality and look attractive. For instance, many Hollywood celebrities have become style icons for many, they endorse a different and unique brand of stylish clothes which create craze among masses to adopt it. Thus making these trendy clothes famous and desirable. Another reason which compels people to imitate other in buying consumer products is attributable to social pressure. That is to say, possessing of some consumer goods are considered as a symbol of social status, and people when observe their friend having those products, strive hard to have those. To illustrate, an Apple manufacturer launch iPhone every year, the new set has minor different of specification from the previously launch set, still, people crazily buy the new gadgets to justify their social hierarchy. Therefore, these practice of copying others making retail products ever popular. In conclusion, I adhere, that the trend of imitating each other leads to the growth in the consumerism of fashionable garments as well as consumer goods. Inspiration toward stylish clothes and peer pressure are the main driving factors to adopt these practices. It is predicted that industry of fashionable fabrics and consumer items will flourish further pertaining to the nature of human to imitate other person.
It is true that adopting
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fashionable
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clothes
and
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consumers
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goods
are growing trend among
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people
. They tend to imitate each
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other
, which depict the growing popularity of
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fashionable
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clothes
and
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consumer
items. I completely
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agree
with this statement.

The primary reason for imitating
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other
human being is
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because
of inspiration. In
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other
words,
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people
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get
inspire from the appealing outfits of a certain
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person and
they want to copy it. They assume that, if they wear those modern outfits they would be able to groom their personality and look attractive.
For instance
,
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many
Hollywood celebrities have become style icons for
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many
, they endorse a
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different
and unique brand of stylish
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clothes
which create craze among masses to adopt it.
Thus
making these trendy
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clothes
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famous
and desirable.

Another reason which compels
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people
to imitate
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other
in buying
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consumer
products is attributable to social pressure.
That is
to say, possessing of
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some
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consumer
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goods
are considered
as a symbol of social status, and
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people
when observe their friend having those products, strive
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hard
to have those. To illustrate, an Apple manufacturer launch iPhone every year, the new set has minor
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different
of specification from the previously launch set,
still
,
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people
crazily
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buy
the new gadgets to justify their social hierarchy.
Therefore
, these practice of copying others making retail products ever popular.

In conclusion
, I adhere, that the trend of imitating each
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other
leads to the growth in the consumerism of
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fashionable
garments
as well
as
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consumer
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
. Inspiration toward stylish
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clothes
and peer pressure are the main driving factors to adopt these practices. It
is predicted
that industry of
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fashionable
fabrics and
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consumer
items will flourish
further
pertaining to the nature of human to imitate
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other
person.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in the popularity of fashion clothes and consumers goods. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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