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The tables show the amount of money spent on Fairtrade coffee and bananas in two separate yearsin the UK, Switzerland, Denmark, Belgium and Sweden. v.1

The tables show the amount of money spent on Fairtrade coffee and bananas in two separate yearsin the UK, Switzerland, Denmark, Belgium and Sweden. v. 1
Since the last decade with the boom in internet and digital media, the methodologies, students use for learning is changing rapidly. At present, many students prefer to use online content for studying whereas more traditional students still use the printed materials. In this essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument and explain my support for the former view. Online content can easily be accessed via multiple devices like smartphones, computers, etc. So clearly, the accessibility of online materials is way more than printed formats like books, papers, etc. For instance, a student can easily access an ebook on his smartphone, which he usually carries with him and is way easier than carrying a book along with him. For this reason, I feel online materials provide more convenience and easier availability to students. Although the world is going digital, using printed materials for studying helps students focus on the task of learning and provides a distraction free environment for the same. Unlike printed formats of learning when a student is studying online they need to use a digital device to access the content and the same digital device can be used for many other purposes too. For example, when using a smartphone the student instead of learning can start chatting which his friends on social media and waste his important time. So there is no doubt that printed materials provide a distraction learning experience. To conclude, like two sides of a coin, both learning formats have their pros and cons. Although online learning provides more accessibility and convenience, using printed materials is distraction free and allows students to focus on learning itself. In my opinion, the convenience and ease of use provided by online learning outweighs its problems of distraction. I think as we move forward in the 21st century, more and more students are going to be using online content for learning, compared to other formats.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The tables show the amount of money spent on Fairtrade coffee and bananas in two separate yearsin the UK, Switzerland, Denmark, Belgium and Sweden. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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