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The table below shows the result of a survey in which people of different age group were asked about their favorite TV program Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.1

The table below shows the result of a survey in which people of different age group were asked about their favorite TV program
It is argued that in order to solve vehicle congestions on the roads, people should be encouraged to move to urban areas. This essay will illustrate the facts the disagree with this view, because more citizens means more cars on the roads and it would also lead to raise the number of passengers for public transportation. In the modern society, it is common to every individual to own a vehicle, hence if more families move to the cities, then the number of cars would eventually increase. The traffic on the roads have increased not because of the people coming from outside of the urban areas, but living in these places. For example, surveys have shown that a large percentage of citizens in busy cities use their cars to commute rather than public transportation. Therefore, it is fair to say that increasing the number of people in cities would lead to more vehicles on roads. Another indirect negative effect of increasing the people in these places is, the more use of public commute systems. Already the existing infrastructure could not accommodate the density of passengers use these facilities. Therefore, governments will have to build more railways and add more buses to address the increasing population in cities, which again is not the best solution for traffic congestions on roads. For instance, The railway system in Colombo city could not provide the service to ever increasing use of its. In conclusion, encouraging the people to move to crowded area is certainly not the way to address the heavy traffic on the roads. Because, it would add more personal and public vehicles in these areas which will lead to more congestions.
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is argued
that in order to solve
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vehicle
congestions on the
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roads
,
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people
should
be encouraged
to
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move
to urban
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areas
. This essay will illustrate the facts
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the disagree
with this view,
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because
more citizens means more cars on the
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roads
and it would
also
lead to raise the number of passengers for
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public
transportation.

In the modern society, it is common to every individual to
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own
a
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vehicle
,
hence
if more families
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move
to the
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cities
, then the number of cars would
eventually
increase. The traffic on the
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roads
have increased not
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because
of the
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people
coming from
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outside of
the urban
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areas
,
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but
living in these places.
For example
, surveys have shown that a large percentage of citizens in busy
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cities
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use
their cars to commute
rather
than
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public
transportation.
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, it is
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fair
to say that
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increasing
the number of
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people
in
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cities
would lead to more
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vehicles
on roads.

Another indirect
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negative
effect of
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increasing
the
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people
in these places is, the more
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use
of
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public
commute systems. Already the existing infrastructure could not accommodate the density of passengers
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use
these facilities.
Therefore
,
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governments
will
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have to
build more railways and
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add
more buses to address the
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increasing
population in
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cities
, which again is not the best solution for traffic congestions on
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roads
.
For instance
, The railway system in Colombo city could not provide the service to ever
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increasing
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use
of its.

In conclusion
, encouraging the
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people
to
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move
to crowded
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area
is
certainly
not the way to address the heavy traffic on the
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roads
.
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Because
, it would
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add
more personal and
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public
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vehicles
in these
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areas
which will lead to more congestions.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The table below shows the result of a survey in which people of different age group were asked about their favorite TV program

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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