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The table below show the income and expenditure of Harckley Hall, a public place for hiring over the period of three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The table below show the income and expenditure of Harckley Hall, a public place for hiring over the period of three years.
There are many ways to protect wildlife in our community, the country, and the world. With the human expansion and their nature exploitation, it became vital to find a sanctuary for indigenous life. The ecologists concern for wildlife sanctuaries to protect endangered species. In this essay, we can discuss the pros and cons of this demand. First of all, Earth is a place which is not only for the benefit of humans but also for every organism. The main necessity of protecting the genus is to maintain the food chain cycle. Wildlife Sanctuary, is a natural habitat, owned by the government or private agency, that safeguards particular breeds of birds and animals. Secondly, there are several revenue-earning opportunities with the preservation of animals and plants which poses threats. For example, over $35 million in revenues come through Yellowstone National Park each year, because of the return of the wolves there. Thirdly, the benefits of maintaining healthy natural world help in preventing erosion, establishing nurseries, and managing waste. Furthermore, there are several species currently being studied because of their potential medical benefits can be shielded within the parks. For instance, Desert pup-fish might offer future treatments for kidney disease, while black bears could offer osteoporosis help. One of the disadvantages is that conservation requires high financial support and it is unfeasible under the scenario of the hiking population. Perhaps the current wildlife conservation actions are doing more harm than good. For example, Inuka- a tropical polar bear brought to Singapore Zoo, its fur often turned green from time to time, due to algae growth. While hugely popular, his presence has been a subject of controversy among conservationists and animal activists. Animals that live in close proximity to one another face higher risks of infection than do individuals, which increases sickness and diseases, which can even be transferred to humans. Nevertheless, animals typically do not live as long in zoos as they would in the wild. To conclude, safeguarding the vulnerable race has to be considered as our duty being a reason that, humans are the main culprit in the deterioration of the environment. A well-balanced eco sphere purifies the environment, giving us clean air to breathe, a healthy water system to support diverse marine life, and arable land for agricultural production. To keep up a balanced life cycle, it is important to safe keep the species which are subjecting to vanishing.
There are
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many
ways to protect
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wildlife
in our community, the country, and the world. With the
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human
expansion and their nature exploitation, it became vital to find a sanctuary for indigenous life. The ecologists concern for
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wildlife
sanctuaries to protect endangered species. In this essay, we can discuss the pros and cons of this demand.

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First of all
, Earth is a place which is not
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only
for the benefit of
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humans
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but
also
for every organism. The main necessity of protecting the genus is to maintain the food chain cycle.
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Wildlife
Sanctuary, is a natural habitat,
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owned
by the
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government
or private agency, that safeguards particular breeds of birds and
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animals
.
Secondly
, there are several revenue-earning opportunities with the preservation of
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animals
and plants which poses threats.
For example
, over $35 million in revenues
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come
through Yellowstone National Park each year,
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because
of the return of the wolves there.
Thirdly
, the benefits of maintaining healthy natural world
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help
in preventing erosion, establishing nurseries, and managing waste.
Furthermore
, there are several species
currently
being studied
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because
of their potential medical benefits can
be shielded
within the parks.
For instance
, Desert pup-fish might offer future treatments for kidney disease, while black bears could offer osteoporosis
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help
.

One of the disadvantages is that conservation requires high financial support and it is unfeasible under the scenario of the hiking population. Perhaps the
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current
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wildlife
conservation actions are doing more harm than
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good
.
For example
,
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Inuka
- a tropical polar bear brought to Singapore Zoo, its fur
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often
turned green from time to time, due to algae growth. While
hugely
popular, his presence has been a subject of controversy among conservationists and
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animal
activists.
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that
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live
in
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close proximity
to one another face higher
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risks
of infection than do individuals, which increases sickness and diseases, which can even
be transferred
to
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humans
.
Nevertheless
,
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animals
typically
do not
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live
as long in zoos as they would in the wild.

To conclude
, safeguarding the vulnerable race
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has to
be considered
as our duty being a reason that,
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humans
are the main culprit in the deterioration of the environment. A well-balanced
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eco
sphere purifies the environment, giving us clean air to breathe, a healthy water system to support diverse marine life, and arable land for agricultural production. To
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keep
up a balanced life cycle, it is
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important
to safe
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keep
the species which are subjecting to vanishing.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The table below show the income and expenditure of Harckley Hall, a public place for hiring over the period of three years.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
400 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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