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the table below shows the amount of waste production ( millions of tons) in six different countries over the twenty year period. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

the table below shows the amount of waste production ( millions of tons) in six different countries over the twenty year period.
Nowadays, in many countries, it is common to allow a leave of absence from the job for a mother to take care of their baby. Is it the right thing to do? . The main advantages are great opportunities to take care of neonatal and rest of the mothers. However, the major drawbacks includes, financial constraint in cases of unpaid maternity leave and obstacle for career progression. I opine that the pros outweighs the cons. Undoubtedly, a leave of absence from work due to childbirth is beneficial and this should be considered by employees. The major advantages include. Firstly, it creates the avenue for mother's to nurture and take care of neonates. To explain, mother hardly has time to breast feed new born at work, so, maternity leave gives them the opportunity to do that. For instance, most banks do not allow mother's to come to work with their babies. This can lead to malnutrition of neonatal because while the mother is at work no one can breast the baby. Secondly, such leaves create time for mothers to rest. To illustrate, gestation period is stressful and demanding. Therefore, such leave is necessary and highly beneficiary. A recent studies by the US has shown that women that was given at least three months maternity leave returns back healthy and were more productive at work. Overall, leave of absence from work for mother's is highly important and should be encouraged. Conversely, if the mothers engage in long maternity leave, it is known to have bad effects. However, the major disadvantages of such long leaves include, financial constraints in the case of unpaid leave. To expatiate, unpaid salary for months will definitely deplete the resources left and could lead to several financial difficulties. For example, single mothers need money for daily up keeps and to feed and cloth their babies. This could be difficult when salaries are not paid for months. Furthermore, long leaves are obstacle for career progression, to exemplify, most firms requires workers to work for a certain number of years to get promoted and once this is done better remuneration follows. Therefore, long maternity leave delays promotion. By and large, long maternity has major drawbacks as mentioned above. In conclusion, a lot of nations have embraced maternity leave as a positive development because, it creates a time for mothers to take care of their babies and time for them to rest. Nevertheless, maternity leave has drawbacks such as financial constraints of long unpaid leave and obstacle for career progression. My two cents goes for that the merits of maternity leave outweigh the demerits.
Nowadays, in
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many
countries, it is common to
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allow
a
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leave
of absence from the job for a
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mother
to take
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care
of their baby. Is it the right thing to do?
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.
The main advantages are great opportunities to take
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care
of neonatal and rest of the mothers.
However
, the
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major
drawbacks includes,
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financial
constraint in cases of unpaid maternity
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leave
and obstacle for career progression. I opine that the pros outweighs the cons.

Undoubtedly
, a
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leave
of absence from
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work
due to childbirth is beneficial and this should
be considered
by employees. The
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major
advantages include.
Firstly
, it creates the avenue for mother's to nurture and take
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care
of neonates. To
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explain
,
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mother
hardly has
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time
to breast feed new born at
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work
,
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so
, maternity
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leave
gives them the opportunity to do that.
For instance
, most banks do not
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allow
mother's to
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come
to
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work
with their
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babies
. This can lead to malnutrition of neonatal
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because
while the
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mother
is at
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work
no one can breast the baby.
Secondly
, such
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leaves
create
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time
for mothers to rest. To illustrate, gestation period is stressful and demanding.
Therefore
, such
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leave
is necessary and
highly
beneficiary. A recent studies by the US has shown that women that was
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given
at least three months maternity
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leave
Consider using "returns".
returns back
healthy and were more productive at
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work
.
Overall
,
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leave
of absence from
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work
for mother's is
highly
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important
and should
be encouraged
.

Conversely
, if the mothers engage in
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long
maternity
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leave
, it
is known
to have
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bad
effects.
However
, the
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major
disadvantages of such
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long
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leaves
include,
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financial
constraints in the case of unpaid
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
leave
. To expatiate, unpaid salary for months will definitely deplete the resources
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left
and could lead to several
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financial
difficulties.
For example
, single mothers need money for daily up
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keeps
and to feed and cloth their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
babies
. This could be difficult when salaries are not paid for months.
Furthermore
,
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long
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leaves
are obstacle for career progression, to exemplify, most firms requires workers to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
for a certain number of years to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
promoted and once this
is done
better remuneration follows.
Therefore
,
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long
maternity
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leave
delays promotion. By and large,
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long
maternity has
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major
drawbacks as mentioned above.

In conclusion
,
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a lot of
nations have embraced maternity
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leave
as a
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positive
development
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because
, it creates a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
for mothers to take
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care
of their
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babies
and
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time
for them to rest.
Nevertheless
, maternity
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leave
has drawbacks such as
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financial
constraints of
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long
unpaid
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leave
and obstacle for career progression. My two cents goes for that the merits of maternity
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leave
outweigh the demerits.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they are going.
Rita Mae Brown

IELTS essay the table below shows the amount of waste production ( millions of tons) in six different countries over the twenty year period.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
433 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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