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Many people believe that we have become a 'disposable' society, throwing things away rather than repairing them and reusing them. Why do you think that is? What are some of the possible problems this can cause? v.1

Many people believe that we have become a 'disposable' society, throwing things away rather than repairing them and reusing them. Why do you think that is? What are some of the possible problems this can cause? v. 1
The advancements in communications, technology, and tourism have made the world become like a small village. Despite the benefits of the international tourism, it is growth had a negative impact on the local societies and their areas. In this essay, I will explain why global tourism advantages do not justify its downsides. On the one hand, the increase in the number of tourists has resulted in economic growth in the developing countries which welcome them, therefore, improving the life quality of the individuals. For example, Nepal has increased its number of tourists visiting it by the double in the last five years, which was reflected in the country's average population income, which increased by 25%. On the other hand, the huge growth of tourism has destroyed many of the traditional and original communities and their lifestyle. For instance, a recent study conducted by the University of London has shown that over 60% of people in Thailand have left their lands and agriculture and started working in the tourism industry and moved to the cities. Hence, many of the villages are now almost empty. In addition to that, many of the popular tourism destinations do not force any laws to protect the environment, which might lead to an increase in the level of pollution and wastes, hence, harming the local animals and plants and downgrading the air quality. In conclusion, while tourism has improved the life of people around the world, it also has negative effects on the environment and local people especially in the third world countries. Therefore, I believe tourism industry should be regulated to insure its advantages exceed its downsides.
The advancements in communications, technology, and
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tourism
have made the world become like a
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small
village. Despite the benefits of the international
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tourism
, it is growth had a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
impact on the local societies and their areas. In this essay, I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
why global
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tourism
advantages do not justify its downsides.

On the one hand, the increase in the number of tourists has resulted in economic growth in the
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developing countries
which welcome them,
therefore
, improving the life quality of the individuals.
For example
, Nepal has increased its number of tourists visiting it by the double in the last five years, which
was reflected
in the country's average population income, which increased by 25%.

On the other hand
, the huge growth of
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tourism
has
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destroyed
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many
of the traditional and original communities and their lifestyle.
For instance
, a recent study conducted by the University of London has shown that over 60% of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in Thailand have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
their lands and agriculture and
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started
working in the
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tourism
industry and
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moved
to the cities.
Hence
,
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many
of the villages are
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now
almost empty.
In addition
to that,
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many
of the popular
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tourism
destinations do not force any laws to protect the environment, which might lead to an increase in the level of pollution and wastes,
hence
, harming the local animals and plants and downgrading the air quality.

In conclusion
, while
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tourism
has
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improved
the life of
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people
around the world, it
also
has
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negative
effects on the environment and local
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people
especially
in the third world countries.
Therefore
, I believe
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tourism
industry should
be regulated
to insure its advantages exceed its downsides.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many people believe that we have become a 'disposable' society, throwing things away rather than repairing them and reusing them. Why do you think that is? What are some of the possible problems this can cause? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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