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The table below gives information of weekly level of consumption by different age groups in ordinary milk and butter healthy alternative HA milk and butter in one European country
In many parts of the world, the trend of on-airing criminal prosecutions for people is blossoming at a very rapid pace. I believe it to be extremely disadvantageous not only in terms of affecting the delinquent's family but also in terms of raising questions on the criminal justice system. This essay will explore how these two mega-disadvantages have the potential to outshine any benefits. Justice court proceedings on television bring forth a lot of mega-drawbacks. Firstly, this new trend has a deep impact on the lives of the criminal's kith and kin due to the stigma associated with them. As their children and wife approach to any organization, they face a lot of trouble and they are recognized as relatives of criminals. They are unable to secure a better position in schools and offices. This fact can be better explained with an example of a report related to broadcasting prosecution, which revealed that the recent surge in bullying of their families on the workplace and schools has been attributed to these trials programs on TV. Thus, this huge flaw has the potential to undermine any benefit by conducting open trials. Secondly, viewers are more likely to form their own opinions related to the crime just based on their lack of understanding of the jury system. Since the trial board stands chances of being easily influenced by the media pressure as well as the viewer’s point of view. Take an example of Japan, where a recent survey revealed that the majority of Japanese prefer to take part in court trials and they want their opinions to be considered. Hence, it somehow leads to their biased ideas towards a problem. However, the only minor advantage that I can relate to this development is that it gives a moral lesson to criminals and people to keep away from such activities and rectify themselves, but this benefit is extremely rare and elusive because a few people learn from real-life examples. To sum up, from the above discussion, it can be concluded that the drawbacks of showing trials on media, especially in terms of affecting the credibility of their family members and developing mistrust on courts overshadow the minor advantage related to educating viewers.
In
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many
parts of the world, the trend of on-airing
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criminal
prosecutions for
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people
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is
blossoming at a
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very
rapid pace. I believe it to be
extremely
disadvantageous not
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only
in terms of affecting the delinquent's family
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but
also
in terms of raising questions on the
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criminal
justice system. This essay will explore how these two mega-disadvantages have the potential to outshine any benefits.

Justice court proceedings on television bring forth
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a lot of
mega-drawbacks.
Firstly
, this new trend has a deep impact on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
of the criminal's kith and kin due to the stigma associated with them. As their children and wife approach to any organization, they face
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a lot of
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
trouble and
they
are recognized
as relatives of
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criminals
. They are unable to secure a better position in schools and offices. This fact can be better
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explained
with an example of a report related to broadcasting prosecution, which revealed that the recent surge in bullying of their families on the workplace and schools has
been attributed
to these
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trials
programs on TV.
Thus
, this huge flaw has the potential to undermine any benefit by conducting open trials.

Secondly
, viewers are more likely to form their
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own
opinions related to the crime
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just
based on their lack of understanding of the jury system. Since the
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trial
board stands chances of being
easily
influenced by the media pressure
as well
as the viewer’s point of view. Take an example of Japan, where a recent survey revealed that the majority of Japanese prefer to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
take part
in court
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
trials and
they want their opinions to
be considered
.
Hence
, it somehow leads to their biased
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ideas
towards a problem.

However
, the
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only
minor advantage that I can relate to this development is that it gives a moral lesson to
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criminals
and
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people
to
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keep
away from such activities and rectify themselves,
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but
this benefit is
extremely
rare and elusive
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because
a few
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people
learn from real-life examples.

To sum up, from the above discussion, it can
be concluded
that the drawbacks of showing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trials
on media,
especially
in terms of affecting the credibility of their family members and developing mistrust on courts overshadow the minor advantage related to educating viewers.
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IELTS essay The table below gives information of weekly level of consumption by different age groups in ordinary milk and butter healthy alternative HA milk and butter in one European country

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
369 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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