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The table below describes percentages of homeschooled students in Some Country in 1999-2004. v.1

The table below describes percentages of homeschooled students in Some Country in 1999-2004. v. 1
There are various benefits and drawbacks of books, radio and television as ways to convey information. In my view, television is definitely the most effective of these three media. The main advantage of books is that they are usually considered to be reliable sources of information. People tend to refer to books when they want to research a subject in depth, and for this reason they continue to play an important role in education. On the other hand, books quickly go out of date, and therefore they are not the best medium for communicating news stories. Radio is a much more effective medium than books for the communication of up-to-date information. We can listen to news broadcasts about events as they happen, and a key benefit of radio is that we can listen to it while doing other activities, such as driving or working. The main drawback of radio, when compared to books or television, is that there is no visual element; we cannot see what the broadcaster is describing. In my opinion, television is the most effective of these three media because it brings us closer to reality than a book or radio programme ever can. For example, we can watch events as they take place on the other side of the world, or we can see the body language of a politician who is being interviewed. The disadvantages of television are that programmes tend to be short and interrupted by advertisements, meaning that information is presented in limited depth. In conclusion, although books, radio and television each have their advantages and disadvantages, it seems to me that the impact of television is greater.
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as ways to convey
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information
. In my view,
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television
is definitely the most effective of these three media.

The main advantage of
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books
is that they are
usually
considered to be reliable sources of
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information
.
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tend to refer to
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books
when they want to research a subject in depth, and
for this reason
they continue to play an
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important
role in education.
On the other hand
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books
quickly
go out of date, and
therefore
they are not the best medium for communicating news stories.

Radio is a much more effective medium than
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books
for the communication of up-to-date
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information
. We can listen to news broadcasts about
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events
as they happen, and a key benefit of
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radio
is that we can listen to it while doing other activities, such as driving or working. The main drawback of
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radio
, when compared to
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books
or
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television
, is that there is no visual element; we cannot
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see
what the broadcaster is describing.

In my opinion,
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television
is the most effective of these three media
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because
it brings us closer to reality than a
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book
or
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radio
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watch
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events
as they take place on the other side of the world, or we can
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see
the body language of a politician who is
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. The disadvantages of
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television
are that
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information
is presented
in limited depth.

In conclusion
, although
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books
,
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and
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television
each have their advantages and disadvantages, it seems to me that the impact of
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television
is greater.
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IELTS essay The table below describes percentages of homeschooled students in Some Country in 1999-2004. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
275 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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