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The table below give information about sales of Fairtrade – labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. v.1

The table below give information about sales of Fairtrade – labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. v. 1
Inclination towards convenience eats on a daily basis is increasing drastically. People find it trivial to make them as part of their daily meal. This essay will describe the negative as well as the positive effects of the habit of consuming ready to eat food on a daily basis. Eating junk food leads to obesity. Now a days people are experiencing a hectic lifestyle which does not allow them to prepare meals at home. This way they eat whatever comes handy. Also, with such busy schedule they are not able to indulge themselves in any sort of physical activity and live a sedentary lifestyle. For instance, people prefer soda cans and cold drinks instead of fruit and vegetable juices. Another example could be children, who finds junk items more tastier than healthy food. Less play and unhealthy eating habits makes them lethargic and they fall prey to obesity. Gaining weight leads to hypertension, heart strokes and many more ailments Having said that, convenience foods play a major role in boosting economy. Since demand for these eatables have risen enormously, more and more outlets can now be seen in every nook and corner of the road. To elaborate with an example, we can see the street foods have become very prominent especially among youths. In office breaks, people tend to grab them as a part of snacks. In conclusion, few advantages cannot surpass the negative impact it has on one's health. It shall never be consumed on a regular basis as it will only deteriorate the health. Though consuming in a controlled manner with an active lifestyle can be opted as an option.
Inclination towards convenience eats on a daily basis is increasing
drastically
.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
People
find it trivial to
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make
them as part of their daily meal. This essay will
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describe
the
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negative
as well
as the
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positive
effects of the habit of consuming ready to eat
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
on a daily basis.

Eating junk
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food
leads to obesity.
Did you mean "nowadays"?
Now a days
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people
are experiencing a hectic lifestyle which does not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
them to prepare meals at home. This way they eat whatever
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
handy.
Also
, with such busy schedule they are not able to indulge themselves in any sort of physical activity and
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live
a sedentary lifestyle.
For instance
,
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people
prefer soda cans and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cold
drinks
instead
of fruit and vegetable juices. Another example could be children, who finds junk items
Use only "tastier" (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
more tastier
than healthy
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food
. Less play and unhealthy eating habits
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
them
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
lethargic and
they fall prey to obesity. Gaining weight leads to hypertension, heart strokes and
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many
more
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
ailments


Having said that, convenience
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foods
play a major role in boosting economy. Since demand for these eatables have risen
enormously
, more and more outlets can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
in every nook and corner of the road. To elaborate with an example, we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
the street
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foods
have become
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very
prominent
especially
among youths. In office breaks,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
tend to grab them as a part of snacks.

In conclusion
, few advantages cannot surpass the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
impact it has on one's health. It shall never
be consumed
on a regular basis as it will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
deteriorate the health. Though consuming in a controlled manner with an active lifestyle can
be opted
as an option.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay The table below give information about sales of Fairtrade – labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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