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The students discuss the man's options. describe his problem. Then state which of the options you prefer and explain why. v.2

The students discuss the man's options. describe his problem. Then state which of the options you prefer and explain why. v. 2
In this modern era, people prefer to use various products like apparels, electronic gadgets for a short while then throw them. This essay delve to explore numerous reasons and explaining problems related to this issue. To commence with, one of the critical causes of this culture is: attraction of people towards consumerism. This is because in search of meeting high standards of the society, they end up buying products not even necessary for them. To exemplify, people try to show their modernisation by wearing newly designed, highly budgeted attire, rather then going for the ones they already have. Moreover, the human does not want to lag behind in the race of updating in accordance to changing fashion trends. It is a common observation that gadgets like mobile phones, television and tablets often change with the prevailing fashion. For example, nowadays people are seen having I-phone11 in comparison to its lower model, all as the influence of society. Turning the coin towards the problem that come along with this custom: Firstly, short time use and throw lead to waste accumulation; hampering the land available for cultivation. Secondly, electronic waste is "non-biodegradable", resulting in soil pollution. Finally, people fail to recognise their utmost needs, ultimately indulging in filthy and wasteful expenses. In conclusion, the main problem related to use and throw culture are not only waste generation and loss of land for cultivation, but also degradation of soil quality. The culprit behind this menace being, people, who are allured toward this consumerism easily, without understanding the necessity.
In this modern era,
people
prefer to
use
various products like apparels, electronic gadgets for a short while then throw them.
This essay delve
to explore numerous reasons and explaining problems related to this issue.

To commence with, one of the critical causes of this culture is: attraction of
people
towards consumerism. This is
because
in search of meeting high standards of the society, they
end
up buying products not even necessary for them. To exemplify,
people
try to
show
their
modernisation
by wearing
newly
designed,
highly
budgeted attire,
rather
then
going for the ones they already have.
Moreover
, the human does not want to lag behind in the race of updating in accordance to changing fashion trends. It is a common observation that gadgets like mobile phones, television and tablets
often
change
with the prevailing fashion.
For example
, nowadays
people
are
seen
having I-phone11
in comparison
to its lower model, all as the influence of society.

Turning the coin towards the problem that
come
along with this custom:
Firstly
, short time
use
and throw lead to waste accumulation; hampering the land available for cultivation.
Secondly
, electronic waste is
"
non-biodegradable
"
, resulting in soil pollution.
Finally
,
people
fail to
recognise
their utmost needs,
ultimately
indulging in filthy and wasteful expenses.

In conclusion
, the main problem related to
use
and throw culture are not
only
waste generation and loss of land for cultivation,
but
also
degradation of soil quality. The culprit behind this menace being,
people
, who
are allured
toward this consumerism
easily
, without understanding the necessity.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay The students discuss the man's options. describe his problem. Then state which of the options you prefer and explain why. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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