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Do you agree or disagree with the statement? All university students should be required to take history courses no matter whatfield they study in. v.6

All university students should be required to take history courses no matter whatfield they study in. v. 6
Nowadays it is argued that many people are delighted to spend the rest of their life in one specific place, whereas others like to change this and live in different places. Therefore, this essay will discuss both sides of this topic using relative illustrations. On the one hand of this argument, it is frequently believed that spending a whole life in one area is more comfortable. This is because people, who live in the same house and with the same neighbourhood, tend to adapt easily. As a result, people's life becomes much easier, where they can locate faster all available facilities next to their doors. To illustrate, the institute of Caritas of the Lebanese Nation published a report that claimed the following: " Oldest generation lived happier than this new generation, because they grew up and died in the same region. That is why living in one specific place is vital. On the other hand, other people find exploring different area is more exciting. In other words, when a person opts to live remotely, he will have the chance to learn abundant culture. As consequences, this individual will experience not only foreign habits, but additionally many traditional foods and languages. To clarify, a research conducted at the University of Oxford, showed that the majority of young adults left their country and live abroad, where they found happiness, independence and gained self confidence. However, in my opinion, people ought to leave their comfort zone and travel, where they will experience real life challenge and excitement. To conclude, although living in one area might be a comfort, travelling to explore the world will give life a meaning. Therefore, I believe that spending years out of our place of birth is an essential fact.
Nowadays it
is argued
that
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many
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people
are delighted
to spend the rest of their
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life
in one specific
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place
, whereas others like to
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change
this and
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live
in
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different
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places
.
Therefore
, this essay will discuss both sides of this topic using relative illustrations.

On the one hand of this argument, it is
frequently
believed that spending a whole
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life
in one area is more comfortable. This is
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because
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people
, who
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live
in the same
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house
and with the same
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neighbourhood
, tend to adapt
easily
.
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,
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people
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life
becomes much easier, where they can locate faster all available facilities
next
to their doors. To illustrate, the institute of
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Caritas
of the Lebanese Nation published a report that claimed the following:
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Oldest generation
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lived
happier than this new generation,
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because
they grew up and
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died
in the same region.
That is
why living in one specific
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place
is vital.

On the
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other
hand,
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other
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people
find exploring
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different
area is more exciting. In
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words, when a person opts to
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live
remotely
, he will have the chance to learn abundant culture. As consequences, this individual will experience not
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only
foreign habits,
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but
additionally
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many
traditional foods and languages. To clarify,
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a research
conducted at the University of Oxford,
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showed
that the majority of young adults
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left
their country and
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live
abroad, where they found happiness, independence and gained
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self confidence
.

However
, in my opinion,
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people
ought to
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leave
their comfort zone and travel, where they will experience real
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life
challenge and excitement.

To conclude
, although living in one area might be a comfort, travelling to explore the world will give
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life
a meaning.
Therefore
, I believe that spending years out of our
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place
of birth is an essential fact.
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IELTS essay All university students should be required to take history courses no matter whatfield they study in. v. 6

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
291 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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