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The students discuss possible solutions to the woman's problem. Briefly describe the problem. Then state which solution you prefer and explain why. v.1

The students discuss possible solutions to the woman's problem. Briefly describe the problem. Then state which solution you prefer and explain why. v. 1
With the continuous development of science and technology, more and more new energy sources are developed and utilized, and nuclear energy is one of them. Some may take the view that nuclear energy is more suitable for meeting the energy needs of certain energy-scarce nations. However, I am not entirely in favour of this one-sided view. On the one hand, as a kind of renewable energy, nuclear energy does have unparalleled natural advantages. Firstly, using nuclear energy to generate electricity does not emit huge amounts of pollutants into the atmosphere like using fossil fuels, so nuclear power generation does not cause air pollution. Secondly, the energy density of nuclear fuel is several million times higher than that of fossil fuels, so the fuel consumed by nuclear power plants is much less than that of thermal power plants with the same power, and the volume of nuclear fuel is small, which is convenient for transportation and storage. Thirdly, the cost of using nuclear energy to generate electricity is relatively low. Because compared to other methods, the proportion of fuel costs for nuclear power generation is smaller, and the cost of nuclear power generation is less susceptible to the impact of the international economic situation. One the other hand, nuclear energy also has some unavoidable shortcomings. Firstly, the use of nuclear energy will produce a large amount of radioactive materials. If they are released to the external environment in an accident, it will cause damage to the ecology and residents. For example, the Chernobyl nuclear contamination accident in the Soviet Union and the Fukushima nuclear power plant leakage accident in Japan both caused very serious disasters. Secondly, the initial investment cost of nuclear power plants is huge. If the management is not perfect, it may bring financial risks and debt crisis to the power company. In summary, nuclear energy is a double-edged sword, which has both advantages and disadvantages. We should use nuclear power scientifically and reasonably so that it can benefit society.
With the continuous development of science and technology, more and more new
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energy
sources
are developed
and utilized, and nuclear
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energy
is one of them.
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Some
may take the view that nuclear
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energy
is more suitable for meeting the
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energy
needs of certain energy-scarce nations.
However
, I am not
entirely
in
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favour
of this one-sided view.

On the one hand, as a kind of renewable
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energy
, nuclear
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energy
does have unparalleled natural advantages.
Firstly
, using nuclear
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energy
to generate electricity does not emit huge amounts of pollutants into the atmosphere like using fossil
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fuels
,
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so
nuclear
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power
generation does not cause air pollution.
Secondly
, the
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energy
density of nuclear
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fuel
is several million times higher than that of fossil
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fuels
,
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so
the
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fuel
consumed by nuclear
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power
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plants
is much less than that of thermal
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power
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plants
with the same
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power
, and the volume of nuclear
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fuel
is
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small
, which is convenient for transportation and storage.
Thirdly
, the
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cost
of using nuclear
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energy
to generate electricity is
relatively
low.
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Because
compared to other methods, the proportion of
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fuel
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costs
for nuclear
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power
generation is smaller, and the
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cost
of nuclear
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power
generation is less susceptible to the impact of the international economic situation.

Did you mean "on"?
One
the other hand, nuclear
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energy
also
has
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some
unavoidable shortcomings.
Firstly
, the
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use
of nuclear
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energy
will produce a large amount of radioactive materials. If they
are released
to the external environment in an accident, it will cause damage to the ecology and residents.
For example
, the Chernobyl nuclear contamination accident in the Soviet Union and the Fukushima nuclear
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power
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plant
leakage accident in Japan both caused
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very
serious disasters.
Secondly
, the initial investment
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cost
of nuclear
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power
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plants
is huge. If the management is not perfect, it may bring financial
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risks
and debt crisis to the
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power
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company
.

In summary, nuclear
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energy
is a double-edged sword, which has both advantages and disadvantages. We should
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use
nuclear
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power
scientifically
and
reasonably
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so
that it can benefit society.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The students discuss possible solutions to the woman's problem. Briefly describe the problem. Then state which solution you prefer and explain why. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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