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the students discuss possible solutions to the man's problem. describe the problem. then state which solution you prefer and explain why. v.1

the students discuss possible solutions to the man's problem. describe the problem. then state which solution you prefer and explain why. v. 1
Nowadays some people prefer to live in cities for a number of huge capabilities, a modern style of living, a lot of substantial events. However, some people think that cities have a low level of safety and fresh air with a magnificent environment. This essay will discuss the positive and negative sides of living in big cities. Generally, a big city has a fascinating place to live, people can find the necessary building and move every moment very easily. All possibilities for schools to give knowledge for children, hospitals to live, and malls to buy something. Therefore, the big city contains different institutions, work centres, world-class company remarkable shopping malls, and restaurants. So people living in a big city have more opportunities for employment and for entertainment. As a result, people living in a big city can find work easily and become educated. On the other hand, the resident's traffic jams and a lot of people can affect your health and. Because of cars, factories, and, cities, it raises the risk levels of pollution and its hazardous for people. That's why villages are the best comfortable place to live in. For instance, fresh air can help to avoid overwhelming and you can spend your time effectively than using technologies that don't worry you. Finally, cities can't help to live calmly and without obstacles and without any problems. To sum up, a big city is an outstanding place to live now. You have to mention the pros of excellent opportunities for making money and the availability of many shops. Personally, I believe that the benefits of enjoying the city-life eventually plays a crucial factor.
Nowadays
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some
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people
prefer to
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live
in
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cities
for a number of huge capabilities, a modern style of
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living
,
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a lot of
substantial
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events
.
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,
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some
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people
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think
that
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cities
have a low level of safety and fresh air with a magnificent environment. This essay will discuss the
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positive
and
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negative
sides of
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living
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big
cities.

Generally
, a
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big
city has a fascinating place to
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live
,
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people
can find the necessary building and
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move
every moment
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very
easily
. All possibilities for schools to give knowledge for children, hospitals to
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live
, and malls to
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buy
something.
Therefore
, the
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big
city contains
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different
institutions, work
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centres
, world-
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class
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company
remarkable shopping malls, and restaurants.
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people
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living
in a
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big
city have more opportunities for employment and for entertainment.
As a result
,
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people
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living
in a
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big
city can find work
easily
and become educated.

On the other hand
, the resident's traffic jams and
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a lot of
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people
can affect your health and.
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of cars, factories, and,
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cities
, it raises the
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risk
levels of pollution and its hazardous for
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people
. That's why villages are the best comfortable place to
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live
in.
For instance
, fresh air can
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help
to avoid overwhelming and you can spend your time
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effectively
than using technologies that don't worry you.
Finally
,
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cities
can't
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help
to
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live
calmly
and without obstacles and without any problems.

To sum up, a
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big
city is an outstanding place to
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live
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now
. You
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have to
mention the pros of excellent opportunities for making money and the availability of
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many
shops.
Personally
, I believe that the benefits of enjoying the city-life
eventually
plays a crucial factor.
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27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay the students discuss possible solutions to the man's problem. describe the problem. then state which solution you prefer and explain why. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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