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The student expresses her opinion of the policy for vehicle registration. Report her opinion and explain the reasons that she gives for having that opinion. v.1

The student expresses her opinion of the policy for vehicle registration. Report her opinion and explain the reasons that she gives for having that opinion. v. 1
Despite the huge evolution in the agricultural field, some nations still suffer from starvations. Although there are several reasons for many people to go hungry, a number of situations can be implemented to deal with such a serious problem. Societies may suffer from starvations for many reasons. Firstly, the overwhelming number of the population that increases every single minute, constitutes a huge load of food resources. AS a result, food will run out and will not cover the increasing demands. Secondly, the green spaces that are specified for agriculture are not enough to supply the expected amount of food for the increasing population. As in South Africa; for instance, the majority of the land is desert, which is not a suitable for planting eatable crops. However, there are two effective solutions to address the starvation problem. One way to tackle this problem is by advising people to use birth-control methods to limit their number. This can be managed by the huge campaigns that will play a vital role in spotting the light on the serious impact of over-population on food resources. Another method is by reclaiming lands; in order, to widen the available area for growing up plants. For example, in order to overcome the food shortage problem in Egypt, the government launched huge projects to reclaim the eastern desert. In conclusion, Although starvation is a serious issue that could lead to death. Fortunately, this problem can be easily solved by Implementing many projects to make use of the deserts and reclaim them; also, by notifying people of the side-effects of their increasing number, so they contribute in reducing it.
Despite the
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huge
evolution in the agricultural field,
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some
nations
still
suffer from
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starvations
. Although there are several reasons for
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many
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people
to go hungry, a
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number
of situations can
be implemented
to deal with such a serious problem.

Societies may suffer from
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starvations
for
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many
reasons.
Firstly
, the overwhelming
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number
of the population that increases every single minute, constitutes a
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huge
load of
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food
resources.
AS a result
,
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food
will run out and will not cover the increasing demands.
Secondly
, the green spaces that
are specified
for agriculture are not
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enough
to supply the
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expected
amount of
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food
for the increasing population. As in South Africa;
for instance
, the majority of the land is desert, which is not a suitable for planting eatable crops.

However
, there are two effective solutions to address the
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starvation
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problem
. One way to tackle this
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problem
is by advising
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people
to
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use
birth-control methods to limit their
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number
. This can
be managed
by the
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huge
campaigns that will play a vital role in spotting the light on the serious impact of over-population on
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food
resources. Another method is by reclaiming lands; in order, to widen the available area for growing up plants.
For example
, in order to overcome the
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food
shortage
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problem
in Egypt, the
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government
launched
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huge
projects to reclaim the eastern desert.

In conclusion
, Although
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starvation
is a serious issue that could lead to death.
Fortunately
, this
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problem
can be
easily
solved by Implementing
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many
projects to
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make
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use
of the deserts and reclaim them;
also
, by notifying
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people
of the
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side-effects
of their increasing
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number
,
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so
they contribute in reducing it.
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IELTS essay The student expresses her opinion of the policy for vehicle registration. Report her opinion and explain the reasons that she gives for having that opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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