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The student expresses her opinion of the policy for international students. Report her opinion and explain the reasons that she gives for having that opinion. v.1

The student expresses her opinion of the policy for international students. Report her opinion and explain the reasons that she gives for having that opinion. v. 1
In many countries, it is becoming increasingly popular to rent an apartment rather than buying it. This essay will highlight some of the benefits and the drawbacks of renting an apartment. To begin with the positives, a significant advantage of staying in leased accommodation is to avoid high mortgaged, maintenance, and property tax. In many countries like India, interest on the home loan is as high as 9% and in addition to this person also has to pay repair cost as well as the property tax. Therefore, it is more economical and convenient to rent a condominium instead of owning it. Furthermore, people, these days are more career-oriented and flexible to relocate in different cities for the higher salary. This makes leased property a preferred option for the people to live. However, renting a house also possess some disadvantages. The most obvious downside is the restriction to renovate. The tenants are not allowed to alter the house according to their choice. Consequently, they end-up compromising with their needs. In addition to this, the rent paid is an additional burden on the pocket rather than an investment. It is an expense as opposed to the mortgage payments that build an asset for the owner. Thus, over time, the owned house as compared to leased one is an asset with a financial value. In conclusion, despite the benefits of avoiding the need to pay the high-interest rates and maintenance cost, the drawback of limitation to renovate and no return on expenses should also be taken into consideration.
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many
countries, it is becoming
increasingly
popular to rent an apartment
rather
than buying it. This essay will highlight
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some of the
benefits and the drawbacks of renting an apartment.

To
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begin
with the positives, a significant advantage of staying in leased accommodation is to avoid high mortgaged, maintenance, and property tax. In
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
countries like India, interest on the home loan is as high as 9% and
in addition
to this person
also
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has to
pay repair cost
as well
as the property tax.
Therefore
, it is more economical and convenient to rent a condominium
instead
of owning it.
Furthermore
,
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people
, these days are more career-oriented and flexible to relocate in
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different
cities for the higher salary.
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This
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makes
leased property a preferred option for the
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people
to
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live
.

However
, renting a
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house
also
possess
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some
disadvantages. The most obvious downside is the restriction to renovate. The tenants are not
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allowed
to alter the
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house
according to their choice.
Consequently
, they
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end
-up compromising with their needs.
In addition
to this, the rent paid is an additional burden on the pocket
rather
than an investment. It is an expense as opposed to the mortgage payments that build an asset for the owner.
Thus
, over time, the
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owned
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house
as compared to leased one is an asset with a financial value.

In conclusion
, despite the benefits of avoiding the need to pay the high-interest rates and maintenance cost, the drawback of limitation to renovate and no return on expenses should
also
be taken
into consideration.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The student expresses her opinion of the policy for international students. Report her opinion and explain the reasons that she gives for having that opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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