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The speakers discuss two possible solutions to the woman’s problem. Briefly sum- marize the problem. Then state which of the solutions you recommend and explain why. v.6

The speakers discuss two possible solutions to the woman’s problem. Briefly sum- marize the problem. Then state which of the solutions you recommend and explain why. v. 6
In this day and age, education has greatly influenced their one's career. Few individuals consider that there is more a benefit to study in the school by separating both of the genders -(boys and girls). Whereas, the rest of people think it is a good way of attending mixed schools has a useful to them. I personally agree with the latter premise. First and foremost, it could be lead to widely understand about the different sex. Scientists study that spending time with boys and girls at school would have a good terms with their classmates, but that does not mean children with go to the separating school is less friendships. For example, while boys and girls have spent time in school together, they tend to automatically learn various perspectives such as boys used to play soccer during the lunch time. On the contrary, girls have spent time chatting with their friends or sharing a make up information. On top of that, although they are more likely to access physical attraction easily and disturb their study due to having a interested in their girlfriend and boyfriend, Nevertheless, spending with men and women have also a crucial role in their school lifestyle. For instance, if they were to encourage their grades what they lack of the subjects, it may be motivated by teaching each other, which means most teenagers might affect far easier interesting different gender. All of considered things that it is undeniable merit that education on mixed sex in school in terms of their grade or social relationship. Therefore, teachers should educate sex properly with open-minded rather than avoid or hide something like that.
In this day and age, education has
greatly
influenced their one's career. Few individuals consider that there is more a benefit to study in the
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school
by separating both of the genders
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-(boys
and
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girls)
.
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Whereas
, the rest of
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people
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think
it is a
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good
way of attending mixed
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schools
has a useful to them.

I
personally
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agree
with the latter premise.

First
and foremost, it could be lead to
widely
understand about the
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different
sex. Scientists study that spending
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time
with
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boys
and
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girls
at
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school
would have a
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good
terms with their classmates,
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but
that does not mean children with go to the separating
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school
is
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less
friendships.
For example
, while
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boys
and
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girls
have spent
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time
in
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school
together, they tend to
automatically
learn various perspectives such as
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boys
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used
to play soccer during the lunch
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time
.
On the contrary
,
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girls
have spent
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time
chatting with their friends or sharing a
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make
up information.

On top of that
, although they are more likely to access physical attraction
easily
and disturb their study due to having
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a
interested in their girlfriend and boyfriend,
Nevertheless
, spending with
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men
and women have
also
a crucial role in their
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school
lifestyle.
For instance
, if they were to encourage their grades what they lack of the subjects, it may
be motivated
by teaching each other, which means most
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
might affect far easier interesting
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
gender.

All of considered things that it is undeniable merit that education on mixed sex in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
in terms of their grade or social relationship.
Therefore
, teachers should educate sex
properly
with open-minded
rather
than avoid or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hide
something like that.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay The speakers discuss two possible solutions to the woman’s problem. Briefly sum- marize the problem. Then state which of the solutions you recommend and explain why. v. 6

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
274 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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