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It is observed that most government pay lot of money for art project for instance, there are more and more paintings and sculpture seen in public places. Some people think that it is wrong and government should spend money on other important thing. v.1

It is observed that most government pay lot of money for art project for instance, there are more and more paintings and sculpture seen in public places. Some people think that it is wrong and government should spend money on other important thing. v. 1
Although some people believe that the only purpose of learning foreign languages to travelling and working in a foreign country. However, other often feel that to get settled in a new country is that not only reason someone learn a new language. In my opinion, people learning different language in order to get successful career and improving the understanding of cultures On the one hand, people who travel to, live in foreign countries, usually learn the language of their host in order to have smooth integration and interaction with locals in the country. In additional, an international student is often required to learn a foreign language, especially if that it is a language of instruction in the institution of learning. For Instance, Chinese students are required to learn English language before can be admitted into universities in the united kingdom. Another reason for learning a foreign language is that it would help to emigrate secure employment faster On the other hand, learn a foreign language extends far beyond travel and employment reason and i believe. Firstly, learning a foreign language is beneficial for those who aiming to get well-paid jobs in multi-national companies. Most of the universal companies always looking for a candidate with multi-language skills, who easily deal with their foreign clients and being a great asset of their companies. For example, in recent research found that 57% of people having a command in more than 3 different languages are easily get hired for high-paid jobs. Secondly, foreign language is the easiest way to understand about the culture, traditional and standard of their living, which teaches us how to communicate and get better interaction with them In conclusion, learning second language is the key to an endless world of opportunities for people looking to work and travel abroad. In my view learning a foreign language opens the door of chances to get worked in well known organizations and help to better understand their culture
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IELTS essay It is observed that most government pay lot of money for art project for instance, there are more and more paintings and sculpture seen in public places. Some people think that it is wrong and government should spend money on other important thing. v. 1

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
324 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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