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The role of prisons should be to punish criminals who have committed serious crimes. Training courses and education offered to prisoners are a waste of taxpayers' money. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

The role of prisons should be to punish criminals who have committed serious crimes. Training courses and education offered to prisoners are a waste of taxpayers' money. v. 1
The role of detainment facilities to sentence the hoodlums who have done genuine violations. Instructional classes and training offered to detainees are a misuse of citizens' cash. I believe that giving training to prisoners is not waste of money. In this essay i will eleborate both negative and positive impact of the given statement and thus will lead to logical conclsion. At the outset, there are numerous of reasons why training should be offered to criminals, however the most conspicious one established in the way that how these classes can assist them with becoming a superior individual, in actuality. For instance, the more defaulters have received courses and education during imprisonment, the less criminal have committed crimes repeatedly. As in illustration, research in this area invariably revels that the reason why most criminals returning to prison, the most biggest reason is that they do not have secure and stable job due to lack of education and skills. Thus, such teachings will be very effective method to prevent convict from making same mistakes again. Another key justification for upholding this motion is that it will reduce the temptation to commit crime again, since the lessons they have received in prison will ensure that they acheive their dreams in many ways. For example, a theif who stole someone's belongings in order to purchase food, may not engage in further crimes as he has has adequate skills and learnings to be employed and thus, lead a respectable life. Various educational programms can motivate and diverse the attitude of a hoodlum towards a better and postive life which is not only beneficial to individual but also deterring the crime in society. To sum up, prisons are one of the important parts of our community which is dealing strongly with the offenders and their activity, despite having any trade-off. While the recent addition of educational and developmental training programs are necessary for both individual and community.
The role of detainment facilities to sentence the hoodlums who have done genuine violations. Instructional classes and
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training
offered to detainees are a misuse of citizens' cash. I believe that giving
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training
to prisoners is not waste of money. In this essay
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i
will
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eleborate
both
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negative
and
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positive
impact of the
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given
statement and
thus
will lead to logical
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conclsion
.

At the outset, there are numerous of reasons why
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training
should
be offered
to criminals,
however
the most
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conspicious
one established in the way that how these classes can assist them with becoming a superior individual, in actuality.
For instance
, the more defaulters have received courses and education during imprisonment, the less criminal have committed
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crimes
repeatedly
. As in illustration, research in this area
invariably
revels that the reason why most criminals returning to prison, the
Use only "biggest" (without 'most') when you use the superlative.
most biggest
reason is that they do not have secure and stable job due to lack of education and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.
Thus
, such teachings will be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
effective method to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
convict from making same mistakes again.

Another key justification for upholding this motion is that it will
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reduce
the temptation to commit
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crime
again, since the lessons they have received in prison will ensure that they
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acheive
their dreams in
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many
ways.
For example
, a
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theif
who stole someone's belongings in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
food, may not engage in
further
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crimes
as he
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has has
adequate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and learnings to
be employed
and
thus
, lead a respectable life. Various educational
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programms
can motivate and diverse the attitude of a hoodlum towards a better and
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postive
life which is not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
beneficial to individual
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but
also
deterring the
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crime
in society.

To sum up, prisons are one of the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
parts of our community which is dealing
strongly
with the offenders and their activity, despite having any trade-off. While the recent addition of educational and developmental
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
training
programs are necessary for both individual and community.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay The role of prisons should be to punish criminals who have committed serious crimes. Training courses and education offered to prisoners are a waste of taxpayers' money. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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