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The role of prisons should be to punish criminals who have committed serious crimes. Training courses and education offered to prisoners are a waste of taxpayer’s money. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

The role of prisons should be to punish criminals who have committed serious crimes. Training courses and education offered to prisoners are a waste of taxpayer’s money. v. 2
With growing population and changes in the environment, there is increase of diseases, and scientist discovers different types of antidotes, but due to not test on human after discovering of medicine and avoid any side effects it is being tested on animals first. While others think it is not necessary to test them on animals. So on this topic we will give a big picture and discuss about both sides. Well to start with, on one hand it is the best way to test any new found medicines on animals 1st then trying on human as we can understand how the medicine will react in a body and what side effects it can cause before trying on peoples as it is very risk and even life threatening for human life. While on the other hand, it is not for sure that all the tests which will be done on animals and what result we get to them we might get same on the human body. As human body is different from animals. For example, maybe some medicine, which is tested on animals are strong, but in the human body, it Might even take someones life or that antidote might be right when tested on animals, but when consumed by human it might have different side effects which might not be found while testing in animals. In conclusion, in my opinion testing on animals can lead to the discovery of a new medicine which can save many lives, but we should not neglect its other side too, we should see that it works the same way and founds the correct results.
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on this topic we will give a
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as we can understand how the
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and what side effects it can cause
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, in my opinion testing on
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can lead to the discovery of a new
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IELTS essay The role of prisons should be to punish criminals who have committed serious crimes. Training courses and education offered to prisoners are a waste of taxpayer’s money. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
270 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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