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Some believe that more academic subjects such as chemistry, physics and history should be taught in schools, while others believe that students will derive more benefit from studying practical subjects, such as motor mechanics and cooking. Discuss both views and provide your own opinion with relevant examples v.1

Some believe that more academic subjects such as chemistry, physics and history should be taught in schools, while others believe that students will derive more benefit from studying practical subjects, such as motor mechanics and cooking. 1
Nowadays, the questions of whether academic subjects or practical ones should be taught in schools has been receiving a great deal of public attention. Both subjects will be discussed in this essay. There are a number of benefits of having access to academic courses. First, since students want to land decent jobs later, academic subcts are necessary. In fact, those subjects, such as Math or Physics prepare for learners fundamental theories to do jecomplex jobs, like doctors or engineers which require deeper understanding about nature of subjects, thus making them become competitive in labour markets. Second, by learning these subjects, students can continue higher education. This means that they are armed with the fundamental knowledge to do research or study, which is conducive to human innovations and developments later. Nevertheless, there are many compelling reasons why many students should learn vocational courses. First, in order to have practical skills and work experience without committing 4 years of college, students tend to attend vocational courses. In fact, short-term practical courses take 3 or 4 months to complete, which helps them shorten their learning time and look for a job much earlier, thus they can make a living as soon as possible. Second, if the majority of people tend to learn vocational courses, it will strengthen labour force. Plenty of evidence suggests that these work force can be crucial in the nations, such as Canada or Japan, which is the lack of workers for manual jobs, thus reaching a balance of labour markets in these countries. In conclusion, no matter academic courses or vocational ones have the same importance. Depending on the job market and career path, students should be able to find their best mix
Nowadays, the questions of whether
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academic
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subjects
or practical ones should
be taught
in schools has been receiving a great deal of public attention. Both
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subjects
will
be discussed
in this essay.

There are a number of benefits of having access to
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academic
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courses
.
First
, since
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students
want to land decent
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jobs
later,
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academic
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subcts
are necessary. In fact, those
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subjects
, such as Math or Physics prepare for learners fundamental theories to do
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jecomplex
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jobs
, like doctors or engineers which require deeper understanding about nature of
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subjects
,
thus
making them become competitive in
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labour
markets. Second, by learning these
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subjects
,
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students
can continue higher education. This means that they
are armed
with the fundamental knowledge to do research or study, which is conducive to human innovations and developments later.

Nevertheless
, there are
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many
compelling reasons why
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many
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students
should learn vocational
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courses
.
First
, in order to have practical
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skills
and work experience without committing 4 years of college,
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students
tend to attend vocational
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courses
. In fact, short-term practical
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courses
take 3 or 4 months to complete, which
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helps
them shorten their learning time and look for a
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job
much earlier,
thus
they can
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make
a living as
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soon
as possible. Second, if the majority of
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people
tend to learn vocational
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courses
, it will strengthen
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labour
force.
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Plenty
of evidence suggests that these work force can be crucial in the nations, such as Canada or Japan, which is the lack of workers for manual
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jobs
,
thus
reaching a balance of
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labour
markets in these countries.

In conclusion
, no matter
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academic
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courses
or vocational ones have the same importance. Depending on the
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job
market and career path,
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students
should be able to find their best
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mix
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some believe that more academic subjects such as chemistry, physics and history should be taught in schools, while others believe that students will derive more benefit from studying practical subjects, such as motor mechanics and cooking. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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