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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern lifestyle. what are the advantages of this trend? do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v.3

The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern lifestyle. what are the advantages of this trend? do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v. 3
With the advent of urbanization, the convenience foods have rapidly gained popularity among the people as it takes less time to be prepared. This essay will discuss various advantages and disadvantages related to such edible items. The most convenient thing about these products is that it is comparatively easy to prepare and requires minimum or no prior knowledge of cooking. For instance, many young people move out of their houses and resides alone in different cities. They find items such as instant noodles and bread easy to make owing to the fact that it requires no other vegetables to be chopped before cooking, and can be instantly made just in five minutes, which comes as a saviour in a situation when they are late for work and have no time to prepare a proper breakfast. However, these foods are not high in nutritional values and also contains ingredients such as Amino motto which can cause harm to our bodies if taken regularly in huge amount. For example, noodles are made of white flour, which is can hinder the health of a person and make him obese. Additionally, is can also jeopardise the digestion of a person's body because these foods are low in fibre, and as a result, lead the problems such as constipation. In conclusion, conventional lifestyle demands for convenience food because they are easy to prepare and needs less preparation time. But they have detrimental effects on a human body because of their less nutritious value and less fibre content.
With the advent of urbanization, the convenience
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foods
have
rapidly
gained popularity among the
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people
as it takes
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less
time to
be prepared
. This essay will discuss various advantages and disadvantages related to such edible items.

The most convenient thing about these products is that it is
comparatively
easy to prepare and requires minimum or no prior knowledge of cooking.
For instance
,
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many
young
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people
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move
out of their
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houses
and resides alone in
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different
cities. They find items such as instant noodles and bread easy to
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make
owing to the fact that it requires no other vegetables to
be chopped
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before
cooking, and can be
instantly
made
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just
in five minutes, which
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comes
as a
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saviour
in a situation when they are late for work and have no time to prepare a proper breakfast.

However
, these
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foods
are not high in nutritional values and
also
contains ingredients such as Amino motto which can cause harm to our bodies if taken
regularly
in huge amount.
For example
, noodles
are made
of white flour, which is can hinder the health of a person and
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make
him obese.
Additionally
, is
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can
also
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jeopardise
the digestion of a person's body
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because
these
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foods
are low in
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fibre
, and
as a result
, lead the problems such as constipation.

In conclusion
, conventional lifestyle demands for convenience
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food
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because
they are easy to prepare and needs
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less
preparation time.
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But
they have detrimental effects on a human body
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because
of their
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less
nutritious value and
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less
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fibre
content.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern lifestyle. what are the advantages of this trend? do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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