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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern lifestyle. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v.1

The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern lifestyle. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1
Nowadays, processed food has become increasingly popular among all parts of the world. The rise of fast food is helping many individuals in order to cope up with modern lifestyle. This essay will discuss the pros and cons of consuming frozen edibles and will explain why positives of this trend does not outweigh any negatives. To begin with, one of the obvious advantages of precooked items is that, they save time instead of cooking for hours. Most of the individuals are piled up with work and does not have time to cook for themselves. These people include students, working professionals etc. In addition to that, these kind of foods, not only saves time, but also money, when compared to other food items that are available in the market. For example, I am working as an engineer where I need to work more than 10 hours and does not have time to cook, however packaged food is helping to survive for the day. Therefore, the rise of fast foods has been helping people to keep pace with the change in lifestyle. Turning to the other side, there are definite disadvanatages by following this trend. One of the drawbacks is that the precooked edibles significantly impact health when consumed for years. This is due to the fact that, the preservatives used in it in order to increase the shelf life can be detrimental to human body. A professor at university of Alberta says that, "70 per cent of the individual who consume ready-made items are prone to different types of cancers". Thus, it has a substantial impact on human health. To conclude, the demand for convenience food in recent times has increased because of current lifestyle. The strengths of this way saving time, money, however, it is impacting people's health. Personally, I believe that the weaknesses of consuming precooked food eventually outweigh any positives.
Nowadays, processed
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has become
increasingly
popular among all parts of the world. The rise of
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food
is helping
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many
individuals in order to cope up with modern lifestyle. This essay will discuss the pros and cons of consuming frozen edibles and will
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explain
why positives of this trend does not outweigh any negatives.

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begin
with, one of the obvious advantages of precooked items is that, they save
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time
instead
of cooking for hours. Most of the individuals
are piled
up with work and does not have
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time
to cook for themselves. These
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people
include students, working professionals etc.
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these kind
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foods
, not
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saves
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time
,
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also
money, when compared to other
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food
items that are available in the market.
For example
, I am working as an engineer where I need to work more than 10 hours and does not have
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time
to cook,
however
packaged
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food
is helping to survive for the day.
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, the rise of
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fast
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foods
has been helping
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people
to
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keep
pace with the
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in lifestyle.

Turning to the other side, there are
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disadvanatages
by following this trend. One of the drawbacks is that the precooked edibles
significantly
impact health when consumed for years.
This is due to the fact that
, the preservatives
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used
in it in order to increase the shelf life can be detrimental to human body. A professor at university of Alberta says that,
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70 per cent of the individual who consume ready-made items are prone to
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different
types of cancers
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.
Thus
, it has a substantial impact on human health.

To conclude
, the demand for convenience
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food
in recent
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times
has increased
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because
of
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current
lifestyle. The strengths of this way saving
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time
, money,
however
, it is impacting
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people
's health.
Personally
, I believe that the weaknesses of consuming precooked
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food
eventually
outweigh any positives.
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IELTS essay The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern lifestyle. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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