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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern lifestyle. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v.2

The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern lifestyle. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v. 2
There is an increasing popularity for junk food among working class people because of the ease in preparing them. The increase in ready made food has aided individuals in keeping up with the fast paced lifestyle in modern times. This essay will discuss the benefits of eating convenience foods as well as point out to the fact that it is dangerous to keep eating ready made food despite the advantages. Most young adults settle for convenience foods mainly because of the ease to prepare them and the time it saves them in preparing such meal. Studies have shown that 89 percent of the American population between the ages of 24-49 prefers to eat snacks for lunch since it gives them the flexibility to work without going through the stress of grocery shopping or preparing an actual meal. For example policemen in the New York State Department prefer a donut and a cup of coffee during working hours. in addition, it saves the time of working class people and makes it easy for them to work and have a meal without losing many working hours to cooking. Yhe above points shows that it is better for working class people to eat ready made food than settling for a home cooked meal. However, the disadvantages to this trend far outweighs its advantages. While some people will argue that convenience food saves time, it is worthy of mention that most of these foods are unhealthy as they contain lots of sugar and cholesterol. Obesity which is a major problem in big cities can be traced to the consumption of convenience foods. It was pointed out in an article from Dietary Journal that 80 per cent of obese people consume junk food everyday. Since the figure is on the increase annually, it would be wisdom if people stop eating convenience foods. In conclusion, the increase in convenience foods can be traced to a modern lifestyle. While it is easy to prepare and saves time, it is also detrimental to public health and hence should be avoided
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class
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in preparing them. The increase in
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ready made
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food
has aided individuals in keeping up with the
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fast
paced lifestyle in modern
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times
. This essay will discuss the benefits of eating
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convenience
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foods
as well
as point out to the fact that it is
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dangerous
to
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keep
eating
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ready made
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food
despite the advantages.

Most young adults settle for
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convenience
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foods
mainly
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because
of the
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ease
to prepare them and the
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time
it
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saves
them in preparing such
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meal
. Studies have shown that 89 percent of the American population between the ages of 24-49 prefers to eat snacks for lunch since it gives them the flexibility to work without going through the
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stress
of grocery shopping or preparing an actual
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meal
.
For example
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donut
and a cup of coffee during
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working
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makes
it easy for them to work and have a
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meal
without losing
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above points
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that it is better for
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working
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class
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people
to eat
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ready made
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food
than settling for a home cooked
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.
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, the disadvantages to this trend far outweighs its advantages.

While
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some
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people
will argue that
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convenience
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food
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time
, it is worthy of mention that most of these
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foods
are unhealthy as they contain lots of sugar and cholesterol. Obesity which is a major problem in
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big
cities can
be traced
to the consumption of
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convenience
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foods
. It
was pointed
out in an article from Dietary Journal that 80 per cent of obese
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people
consume junk
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food
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everyday
. Since the figure is on the increase
annually
, it would be wisdom if
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people
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stop
eating
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convenience
foods.

In conclusion
, the increase in
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convenience
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foods
can
be traced
to a modern lifestyle. While it is easy to prepare and
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saves
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time
, it is
also
detrimental to public health and
hence
should be
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avoided
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern lifestyle. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
341 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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