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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of modern lifestyle. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v.1

The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of modern lifestyle. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1
The growth in pre-processed food has benefited individuals to maintain the pace of the hectic and contemporary way of life. In this essay, an attempt shall be made to outline the merits and demerits of this current situation and also verify if the benefits thereof are more than the shortfalls or otherwise. To begin with, lifestyle has changed to a maddening pace and time is what we lack. Firstly, The cooking time comes down considerably because of semi cooked foods. . The stage of pre-preparations can be eliminated, saving a lot of time involved. For example, the noodles are fried in oil for a long time, we can prepare this with only boiling it in water. Secondly, shelf life of the convenience food is always mentioned in the packaging and has a considerable shelf life. As the packaged food is usually packed in hygienic and sterile conditions with definite shelf life. For instance, oats are packed in airtight packages with a shelf life of more than 6 months. Thirdly, Tracking micronutrients are easier when using processed foods. Due to various regulations of food inspection authorities the micronutrients are displayed as part of the packaging. The backside of the packages contains a description of the ingredients used and a box stating the amount of carbohydrates, proteins, fats etc. On the contrary, over a period of time people get various physical ailments. As the canned food uses preservatives which are not natural in some cases this causes physical illness. The high content of sodium, chemicals used for pre-processing food to increase shelf life causes a lot of diseases like hypertension. There is a study which finds one cup of noodles contains more sodium than required for a person for the entire day. Causing bloating and water retention in him. Weighing the above advantages and disadvantages we see that it's more useful to use packaged food with not over reliance on it.
The growth in
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pre-processed
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food
has benefited individuals to maintain the pace of the hectic and contemporary way of
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life
. In this essay, an attempt shall
be made
to outline the merits and demerits of this
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current
situation and
also
verify if the benefits thereof are more than the shortfalls or
otherwise
.

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with, lifestyle has
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changed
to a maddening pace and
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time
is what we lack.

Firstly
, The cooking
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time
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comes
down
considerably
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because
of semi cooked
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foods
.
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The stage of
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pre-preparations
can
be eliminated
, saving
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a lot of
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time
involved.

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are fried
in oil for a long
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time
, we can prepare this with
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only
boiling it in water.

Secondly
,
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shelf
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life
of the convenience
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food
is always mentioned in the packaging and has a considerable
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shelf
life.

As the packaged
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food
is
usually
packed in hygienic and sterile conditions with
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definite
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shelf
life.

For instance
, oats
are packed
in airtight packages with a
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shelf
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life
of more than 6 months.

Thirdly
, Tracking micronutrients are easier when using processed foods.

Due to various regulations of
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food
inspection authorities the micronutrients
are displayed
as part of the packaging.

The backside of the packages contains a description of the ingredients
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used
and a box stating the amount of carbohydrates, proteins, fats etc.

On the contrary
, over a period of
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time
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people
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get
various physical ailments.

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the canned
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food
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uses
preservatives which are not natural in
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some
cases this causes physical illness.

The high content of sodium, chemicals
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used
for
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pre-processing
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food
to increase
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shelf
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life
causes
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a lot of
diseases like hypertension.

There is a study which finds one cup of noodles contains more sodium than required for a person for the entire day. Causing bloating and water retention in him.

Weighing the above advantages and disadvantages we
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see
that it's more useful to
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use
packaged
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food
with not over reliance on it.
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IELTS essay The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of modern lifestyle. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
16 paragraphs
319 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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