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The rise of convenience food has helped people keep up with the speed of modern lifestyle. What are the advantages and disadvantage of the same? v.2

The rise of convenience food has helped people keep up with the speed of modern lifestyle. What are the advantages and disadvantage of the same? v. 2
Increasing production of different varieties of ready to eat meal helps people in keeping up with the high pace life. Packaged food help in saving time and it is easily portable to different places, but there are also some drawbacks to be taken into account. On the one hand, availability of convenience food has many benefits to offer. Firstly, people can save their lots of precious time, which they otherwise used to spend in the kitchen, making meals for the family. Earlier working people used to face many difficulties in finding time for the family, but now parents can utilize this cooking time in other activities such as helping children with their homework or playing with kids. Secondly, it is advantageous to use packaged food as it can be easily carried to any place of the world. For instance, vegan people, who visit a foreign country for any business trip, where vegetarian food is not available, can carry and survive on such food items. On the other hand, consuming counter food has some downsides too. One of the possible problems with this is, it is not as healthy as homemade foods. Packaged food contains many preservatives, which might be harmful for human body, if consumed regularly. Another issue is, it is not pocket friendly and can be unaffordable for a few people. If food is cooked at home, then it costs much lesser than the ready made food items, thus people can save their money by preparing meals for themselves. In conclusion, while there are some benefits of convenience food, daily consumption of it can also lead to some serious health issues and can be a burden on people's pocket.
Increasing production of
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different
varieties of ready to eat meal
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helps
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people
in keeping up with the high pace life. Packaged
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food
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help
in saving
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time
and it is
easily
portable to
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different
places,
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there are
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some
drawbacks to
be taken
into account.

On the one hand, availability of convenience
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food
has
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many
benefits to offer.
Firstly
,
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people
can save their lots of precious
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time
, which they
otherwise
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used
to spend in the kitchen, making meals for the family. Earlier working
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people
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used
to face
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many
difficulties in finding
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time
for the family,
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but
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now
parents can utilize this cooking
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time
in other activities such as helping children with their homework or playing with kids.
Secondly
, it is advantageous to
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use
packaged
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food
as it can be
easily
carried to any place of the world.
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, vegan
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people
, who visit a foreign country for any business trip, where vegetarian
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food
is not available, can carry and survive on such
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food
items.

On the other hand
, consuming counter
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food
has
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downsides too. One of the possible problems with this is, it is not as healthy as homemade
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foods
. Packaged
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food
contains
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many
preservatives, which might be harmful for human body, if consumed
regularly
. Another issue is, it is not pocket friendly and can be unaffordable for a few
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people
. If
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food
is cooked
at home, then it costs much lesser than the
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ready made
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food
items,
thus
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people
can save their money by preparing meals for themselves.

In conclusion
, while there are
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some
benefits of convenience
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food
, daily consumption of it can
also
lead to
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some
serious health issues and can be a burden on
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people
's pocket.
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IELTS essay The rise of convenience food has helped people keep up with the speed of modern lifestyle. What are the advantages and disadvantage of the same? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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