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News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become use to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported. v.8

News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become use to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported. v. 8
IN THIS TODAY'S WORLD, EVERYONE BECOME A AWARE OF WHAT IS HAPPENING IN THE WORLD THROUGH NEWS CHANNELS AND PAPERS. IN THAT SECTOR, EDITORS PLAY A CRUCIAL ROLE TO SELECT THE NEWS TO BE PRESENTED IN THOSE MEDIUMS. FIRSTLY, THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS THE PRIME FACTOR THAT AFFECT THE SELECTIONS AND SECONDLY, STATE THAT WHY WE DO NOT BECOME ADDICTED TO THE BAD NEWS. LASTLY, ANSWERE IN THE FAVOUR OF MIX NEWS REPORTING. ON THE ONE HAND, THE MAJOR FACTOR BEHIND THE INFLUENCE IS THE SENSITIVITY OF THE GENERAL PUBLIC ABOUT THE PERTICULAR TOPIC. WHEN THE NEWS IS HIGHLY SENSITIVE, PUBLIC REACT ACCORDINGLY THUS, MEDIA MAKE THE SELECTION AS PER THE PUBLIC CONCERN. FOR EXAMPLE, AS PER THE USA PUBLISHERS, 90% AMOUNT OF NEWS ARE REGARDING THE AMERICANS INTEREST AND CONCERN. HENCE, I BELIEVE, THE SENSITIVITY MIGHT PLAYS A VITAL ROLE WHEN CHOOSING THE REPORTED NEWS. ON THE OTHER HAND, SUCH BAD NEWS MAY AFFECT THE PUBLIC HOWEVE, INDIVIDUAL NEVER BECONE THE ADDICTED TO READ THE DETRIMENTAL INFORMATION. OWNING TO THE FACT THAT THE DEVASTATING NEWS MIGHT REFRAIN PEOPLE FROM READING IT AND OFTENLY THEY CHANCE THIER PASSION. NONETHELESS, I THINK, IT IS BETTER TO SHOW THE REALITY OF THE WORLD BU REPORTING BOTH NEGATIVE ANS POSITIVE INFORMATION. BECAUSE, BOTH THE NEWS REPRESENT THE CURRENT CONDITION OG THE HUMANITY APROND US THAT MAKE US MORE AWARE ABOUT IT. IN CONCLUSION. NEWS HAS BECOME INDEED PART OF THE EVERY PERSON'S DAILY LIFE AS IT GUIDE THEM HOW TO DEAL WITH SUCH SITUATIONS. NEVERTHELSS, AT THE END, IT IS RELY ON THE CIVILIANS OWN'S PASSION.
IN THIS
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TODAY
'S WORLD, EVERYONE BECOME
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A AWARE OF
WHAT IS HAPPENING IN THE WORLD THROUGH
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NEWS
CHANNELS AND PAPERS. IN THAT SECTOR, EDITORS PLAY A CRUCIAL ROLE TO SELECT THE
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NEWS
TO
BE PRESENTED
IN THOSE MEDIUMS.
FIRSTLY
, THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS THE PRIME FACTOR THAT AFFECT THE SELECTIONS AND
SECONDLY
, STATE THAT WHY WE DO NOT BECOME ADDICTED TO THE
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
BAD
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NEWS
.
LASTLY
,
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ANSWERE
IN THE
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FAVOUR
OF MIX
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NEWS
REPORTING.

ON THE ONE HAND, THE MAJOR FACTOR BEHIND THE INFLUENCE IS THE SENSITIVITY OF THE GENERAL
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PUBLIC
ABOUT THE
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PERTICULAR
TOPIC. WHEN THE
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NEWS
IS
HIGHLY
SENSITIVE,
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PUBLIC
REACT
ACCORDINGLY
THUS
, MEDIA
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MAKE
THE SELECTION AS PER THE
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PUBLIC
CONCERN.
FOR EXAMPLE
, AS PER THE USA PUBLISHERS, 90% AMOUNT OF
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
NEWS
ARE REGARDING THE AMERICANS INTEREST AND CONCERN.
HENCE
, I BELIEVE, THE SENSITIVITY MIGHT PLAYS A VITAL ROLE WHEN CHOOSING THE REPORTED NEWS.

ON THE OTHER HAND
, SUCH
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BAD
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NEWS
MAY AFFECT THE
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PUBLIC
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HOWEVE
, INDIVIDUAL NEVER
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BECONE
THE ADDICTED TO READ THE DETRIMENTAL INFORMATION. OWNING TO THE FACT THAT THE DEVASTATING
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NEWS
MIGHT REFRAIN
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PEOPLE
FROM READING IT AND
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OFTENLY
THEY CHANCE
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THIER
PASSION.

NONETHELESS, I
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THINK
, IT IS BETTER TO
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SHOW
THE REALITY OF THE WORLD BU REPORTING BOTH
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NEGATIVE
ANS
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POSITIVE
INFORMATION.
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BECAUSE
, BOTH THE
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NEWS
REPRESENT THE
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CURRENT
CONDITION
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OG
THE HUMANITY
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APROND
US THAT
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MAKE
US MORE AWARE ABOUT IT.

IN CONCLUSION
.
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NEWS
HAS BECOME
INDEED
PART OF THE EVERY PERSON'S DAILY LIFE AS IT GUIDE THEM HOW TO DEAL WITH SUCH SITUATIONS.
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NEVERTHELSS
, AT THE
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END
, IT IS
Consider using a past participle here: "relied".
RELY
ON THE CIVILIANS
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OWN
'S PASSION.
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14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes

IELTS essay News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become use to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported. v. 8

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
263 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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