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As most people spend a major of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v.1

As most people spend a major of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 1
Job amusement is believed to be an important aspect of one’s self-comfort and a happy life. To be satisfied with a job, many expectations need to be fulfilled and it is a matter of debate whether a job pleasure exists or not. So how do we define job fulfilment, and which elements are essential for an agreeable task? Firstly, an individual should choose a job that matches his skill set and where he could find mental vindication. A job that provides a sense of fulfilment, secure working environment and pays well is a desired job for many. Traditionally, a job that has a social status, better pay scale and gives freedom to an employee is said to be a dream job. Unfortunately, not all of us have such dream jobs. Some other important factors like adequate holidays, compensations, learning opportunity, career growth, a decent boss, nice colleagues, job security and fair working climate are often considered the most important aspects of a job. I believe a nice job should guarantee progress - both skills and remuneration. For example, training courses that help employee gain new skills would help improve his career and therefore benefit his workplace and his community as well. Since job satisfaction and expectation of employee change with time, it is almost unrealistic to define a job which is perfectly and completely satisfactory for all. While some people are unsatisfied with their jobs because of poor payment, others complain about the future prospect. Even if these criteria are met at a job, some people would start complaining about other aspects. That is why it is quite unrealistic that each and every employee would be happy in their workplace. In conclusion, some common factors like salary, respect, learning opportunity, work environment and job security could be influential aspects of job satisfaction, but it is quite impossible for all employees to be happy in their job environment.
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to be an
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aspect
of one’s self-comfort and a happy life. To
be satisfied
with a
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job
,
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many
expectations need to
be fulfilled
and it is a matter of debate whether a
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job
pleasure exists or not.

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how do we define
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job
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fulfilment
, and which elements are essential for an agreeable task?
Firstly
, an individual should choose a
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job
that matches his
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
set and where he could find mental vindication. A
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job
that provides a sense of
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fulfilment
, secure working environment and pays well is a desired
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job
for
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many
.
Traditionally
, a
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job
that has a social status, better pay scale and gives freedom to an
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employee
is said
to be a dream
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job
. Unfortunately, not all of us have such dream
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jobs
.
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Some
other
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important
factors like adequate holidays, compensations, learning opportunity, career growth, a decent boss, nice colleagues,
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job
security and
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fair
working climate are
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often
considered the most
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important
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aspects
of a
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job
. I believe a nice
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job
should guarantee progress
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-
both
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skills
and remuneration.
For example
, training courses that
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help
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employee
gain new
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skills
would
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help
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improve
his career and
therefore
benefit his workplace and his community
as well
.

Since
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satisfaction and expectation of
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employee
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change
with time, it is almost unrealistic to define a
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which is
perfectly
and completely satisfactory for all. While
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some
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people
are unsatisfied
with their
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jobs
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because
of poor payment, others complain about the future prospect. Even if these criteria
are met
at a
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job
,
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some
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people
would
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start
complaining about other
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aspects
.
That is
why it is quite unrealistic that each and every
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employee
would be happy in their workplace.

In conclusion
,
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some
common factors like salary, respect, learning opportunity, work environment and
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security could be influential
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aspects
of
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satisfaction,
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but
it is quite impossible for all
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employees
to be happy in their
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job
environment.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay As most people spend a major of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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