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The reason that most individuals are in debt is due to the overuse and irresponsible use of credit cards. Banks should not issue credit cards unless they are completely sure of an individual’s ability to pay back their debts. To what extent do you agree with this? v.1

The reason that most individuals are in debt is due to the overuse and irresponsible use of credit cards. Banks should not issue credit cards unless they are completely sure of an individual’s ability to pay back their debts. v. 1
Negligent use of credit cards can cause debts. Thereby, I agree that banks should check the financial strength and the repaying capacity of a person before offering them electronic card facility. This essay will discuss how an inappropriate usage of plastic card will put an individual at a financial risk. Irresponsible use of credit cards can push anyone into the debt trap. Still, the demand for credit cards continues to increase. People consider credit cards as a means to improve lifestyles. They borrow more money than they should as the credit cards are easy to use and readily acceptable in so many places. Unfortunately, some people cannot pay back the debts and get into huge financial trouble. Banks usually won’t issue credit cards if they are not completely satisfied with the finances of the customer. They always check the credit history and financial situation of the customer and also explain the burdensome consequences that can happen to the customer if they use the card irresponsibly. Still, many people use the card carelessly and get into permanent debt. So it is unfair to blame the bank alone for the credit card holder’s mistakes. Another factor that we need to acknowledge is the unpredictable nature of a person’s financial situation. People can fall ill or lose their job. Both of these are situations that can considerably affect a person’s ability to repay his debt. In most cases such situations cannot be predicted and are not in the control of either the bank or the customer. To conclude, it is important for the banks to verify the customer’s ability to pay back debts before giving them credit cards. Customers also have a responsibility to control their spending habits to protect themselves from debt.
Negligent
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can cause
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debts
. Thereby, I
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agree
that
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banks
should
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check
the
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financial
strength and the repaying capacity of a person
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before
offering them electronic
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card
facility. This essay will discuss how an inappropriate usage of plastic
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card
will put an individual at a
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financial
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risk
.

Irresponsible
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use
of
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credit
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cards
can push anyone into the
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debt
trap.
Still
, the demand for
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credit
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cards
continues to increase.
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People
consider
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credit
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cards
as a means to
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improve
lifestyles. They borrow more money than they should as the
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credit
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cards
are easy to
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use
and
readily
acceptable in
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so
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many
places. Unfortunately,
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some
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people
cannot pay back the
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debts
and
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get
into huge
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financial
trouble.

Banks
usually
won’t issue
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credit
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cards
if they are not completely satisfied with the finances of the
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customer
. They always
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check
the
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credit
history and
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financial
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situation
of the
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customer
and
also
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explain
the burdensome consequences that can happen to the
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customer
if they
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use
the
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card
irresponsibly
.
Still
,
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many
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people
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use
the
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card
carelessly
and
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get
into permanent
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debt
.
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So
it is unfair to blame the
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bank
alone for the
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credit
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card
holder’s mistakes.

Another factor that we need to acknowledge is the unpredictable nature of a person’s
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financial
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situation
.
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People
can fall ill or lose their job. Both of these are
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situations
that can
considerably
affect a person’s ability to repay his
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debt
.
In most cases
such
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situations
cannot
be predicted
and are not in the control of either the
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bank
or the customer.

To conclude
, it is
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important
for the
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banks
to verify the
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customer’s
ability to pay back
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debts
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before
giving them
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credit
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cards
.
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Customers
also
have a responsibility to control their spending habits to protect themselves from
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debt
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
50Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay The reason that most individuals are in debt is due to the overuse and irresponsible use of credit cards. Banks should not issue credit cards unless they are completely sure of an individual’s ability to pay back their debts. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
290 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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