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The Quality of life in large cities is decreasing. What could be the reasons behind this. What measures can be taken to solve this problem? v.2

The Quality of life in large cities is decreasing. What could be the reasons behind this. What measures can be taken to solve this problem? v. 2
With the industrialization, it is inevitable that more people will relate from rural regions to urban cities in order to seek for a better living environment and better opportunities in careers. Therefore, the large migration will contribute to the worsening living environment for local residents due to many factors. Migration from rural to urban area leads to population growth in large cities. High population density will lead to people's more demand of food, housing and entertainment. However, limited resources and services in cities can not meet the residents’ basic needs. Overcrowded people in cities, especially in inner city areas, will contribute poor living environment, high unemployed rate and crime rates. In addition, they also result in traffic congestion in cities due to increase in transport vehicles, especially in private cars. Last but not the least, increasing migration also results in environmental pollution in the regions. More garbages and wastes will produced by over population and industrialization. More exhausted toxic gases will be emitted into the atmosphere by increased public transportation. All these will contribute in the worse living environment for local residents in large cities. With the increasing inevitable migration worldwide, proper methods should be carried out by local governments in order to maintain high quality of urban lifestyle. Firstly, it is necessary for governments to increase budgets in housing and facilities construction to meet the increasing demand of climbing population. More affordable housing will provide a healthy living environment for residents. The development of cities, such as building new houses and facilities and maintaining the building also create jobs in the work force. With proper employment rate, the crime rate might be reduced. In addition, investing money in public transport system improvement will relieve the traffic congestions and attract more residents to use public transport rather than driving their own cars. Therefore, the number of private cars will reduce on the road and traffic congestion will be relieved. As stated above, the quality of life in large cites is affected by increasing migration from rural area to urban cities. The factors which lead to worsen living environment in cities include high density population, dirty living environment, traffic congestion and increasing crime rates. Therefore, in order to maintain the inner city living environment, city governments should increase budgets in housing and facilities construction and improvement of public transport.
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people
will relate from rural regions to
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urban
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cities
in order to seek for a better
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living
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environment
and better opportunities in careers.
Therefore
, the
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large
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migration
will contribute to the worsening
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living
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environment
for local
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residents
due to
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many
factors.

Migration from rural to
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urban
area leads to
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population
growth in
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large
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cities
.
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High
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population
density will lead to
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people
's more demand of food, housing and entertainment.
However
, limited resources and services in
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cities
can not
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meet
the
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residents’
basic needs. Overcrowded
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people
in
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cities
,
especially
in inner city areas, will contribute poor
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living
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environment
,
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high
unemployed
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rate
and crime
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rates
.
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, they
also
result in
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traffic
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congestion
in
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cities
due to increase in
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transport
vehicles,
especially
in private cars. Last
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but
not the least,
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increasing
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migration
also
results in environmental pollution in the regions. More
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garbages
and wastes will produced by over
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population
and industrialization. More exhausted toxic gases will
be emitted
into the atmosphere by increased
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public
transportation. All these will contribute in the worse
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living
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environment
for local
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residents
in
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large
cities.

With the
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increasing
inevitable
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migration
worldwide, proper methods should
be carried
out by local
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governments
in order to maintain
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high
quality of
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urban
lifestyle.
Firstly
, it is necessary for
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governments
to increase budgets in housing and facilities construction to
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meet
the
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increasing
demand of climbing
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population
. More affordable housing will provide a healthy
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living
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environment
for
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residents
. The development of
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cities
, such as building new
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houses
and facilities and maintaining the building
also
create jobs in the work force. With proper employment
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rate
, the crime
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rate
might be
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reduced
.
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, investing money in
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public
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transport
system improvement will relieve the
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traffic
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congestions
and attract more
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residents
to
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use
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public
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transport
rather
than driving their
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own
cars.
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, the number of private cars will
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reduce
on the road and
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traffic
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congestion
will
be relieved
.

As stated above, the quality of life in
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large
cites is
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affected
by
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increasing
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migration
from rural area to
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urban
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cities
. The factors which lead to worsen
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living
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environment
in
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cities
include
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high
density
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population
, dirty
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living
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environment
,
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traffic
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congestion
and
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increasing
crime
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rates
.
Therefore
, in order to maintain the inner city
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living
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environment
, city
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governments
should increase budgets in housing and facilities construction and improvement of
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public
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transport
.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
76Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay The Quality of life in large cities is decreasing. What could be the reasons behind this. What measures can be taken to solve this problem? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
385 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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