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The prevention of health problem and illness is morr importent than the treatment and medicine. Government funding should reflect this to what extent do you agree. v.2

The prevention of health problem and illness is morr importent than the treatment and medicine. Government funding should reflect this v. 2
All the money in the world can' t buy you back good health. Now a days, people are believing old proverb concepts like prevention is better than cure. They assume that, than giving importance to treatment and medicine, comparatively spending money on preventing health problems and illness gives good results. Government should encourage people to take preventative measures. I agree with the given statment that, the prevention of health problems and illness is more important than the treatment and medicine. Government founding should reflect this. Takeing preventionary steps gives grate results in society. Now a days, people are neglecting proper food diet and physical fitness due to their hectic schedule so majority of people are affecting towards health problems because lack of taking prevention steps. Moreover, by tacking safety steps, leads to decrease the effect of health problems. day by day, people are adducting to smocking and alcohol which are bad indicators to health in this scenario taking prevention steps like joining them in rehabilitation centre or using some good medicine to stop smoking and consuming alcohol gives a great results and not to face terrible health problems. For instance, in recent new survey says 20% of Indian people are facing health problems because of not taking proper prevention measures. They are a lot of factores that effects in this situation. Government can play a key and affective role in this particular scenario. Authority can change society' s by taking proper new steps, rules and regulations like educating people on prevention steps and spending money on advertisement about preventions which gives a splendid impact on people' s mind set. One clear example, Germany government took profound steps in prevention measures on health problems shows tremendous result. In my perspective, tacking new preventionary steps leads to decrease health problems in society and government steps shows good results on people.
All the money in the world
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good
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health
.
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Now a days
,
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people
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are believing
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old
proverb concepts like
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prevention
is better than cure. They assume that,
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than
giving importance to treatment and medicine,
comparatively
spending money on preventing
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health
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problems
and illness
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gives
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good
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results
.
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Government
should encourage
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people
to take preventative measures. I
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agree
with the
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given
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statment
that, the
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prevention
of
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health
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problems
and illness is more
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important
than the treatment and medicine.
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Government
founding should reflect this.
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Takeing
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preventionary
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steps
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gives
grate
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results
in society.

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a days,
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people
are neglecting proper food diet and physical fitness due to their hectic schedule
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so
majority of
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people
are affecting towards
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health
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problems
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because
lack of taking
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prevention
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steps
.
Moreover
, by tacking safety
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steps
, leads to decrease the effect of
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health
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problems
.
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day
by day,
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people
are
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adducting
to smocking and alcohol which are
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bad
indicators to
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health
in this scenario taking
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prevention
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steps
like joining them in rehabilitation
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centre
or using
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some
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good
medicine to
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stop
smoking and consuming alcohol
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gives
a great
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results
and not to face terrible
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health
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problems
.
For instance
, in recent new survey says 20% of Indian
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people
are facing
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health
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problems
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because
of not taking proper
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prevention
measures. They are
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a lot of
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factores
that effects in this situation.

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Government
can play a key and affective role in this particular scenario. Authority can
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change
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society&
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steps
,
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rules
and regulations like educating
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people
on
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prevention
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steps
and spending money on advertisement about
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preventions
which
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gives
a splendid impact on
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people&
#039; s mind set. One
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example, Germany
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government
took profound
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steps
in
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prevention
measures on
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health
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problems
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tremendous result.

In my perspective, tacking new
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preventionary
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steps
leads to decrease
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health
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problems
in society and
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government
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steps
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shows
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good
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results
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people
.
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60Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Mistakes

IELTS essay The prevention of health problem and illness is morr importent than the treatment and medicine. Government funding should reflect this v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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