As of today, the role of women in society has been immensely modified as women now are encouraged to pursue their own career while some argue that the lack of time spending for their children triggers the adolescent crime, which this writing will shed a new light on.
To embark on, it is the financial stable together with the significant status that working women can make use of. The sources of revenue making by women can make a great contribution to the whole expenditure of the family, which resulting in the better education and lifestyles for children. Furthermore, being literate and experienced facilitates women to access the effectiveness educating and foster approach so that they can bring up their children well as well as keeping working. On the top of that, the modern women play an essential role in numerous fields as the women's achievements has been admitted thus, women should be stimulated to work.
Nevertheless, one of the most vital role of women throughout the history is giving birth in associate with having the custody of children. Therefore, working women are claimed to be irresponsible for unable to stay close to their child hood and give them enough care that they deserve. Only being cared and loved appropriately can the children be well-being along with well-behaved, otherwise children are more likely to involve in crime in their adolescent.
All in all, I firmly supposed that modern women should figure out how to balance their work as well as their home in order to accomplish all the works.
As of
today
, the role of
women
in society has been
immensely
modified as
women
now
are encouraged
to pursue their
own
career while
some
argue that the lack of time spending for their
children
triggers the adolescent crime, which this writing will shed a new light on.
To embark on, it is the financial stable together with the significant status that working
women
can
make
use
of. The sources of revenue making by
women
can
make
a great contribution to the whole expenditure of the family, which resulting in the better education and lifestyles for
children
.
Furthermore
, being literate and experienced facilitates
women
to access the effectiveness educating and foster approach
so
that they can bring up their
children
well
as well
as keeping working. On the top of that, the modern
women
play an essential role in numerous fields as the women's achievements has
been admitted
thus
,
women
should
be stimulated
to work.
Nevertheless
, one of the most vital role of
women
throughout the history is giving birth in associate with having the custody of
children
.
Therefore
, working
women
are claimed
to be irresponsible for unable to stay close to their child hood and give them
enough
care that they deserve.
Only
being cared
and
loved
appropriately
can the
children
be well-being along with well-behaved,
otherwise
children
are more likely to involve in crime in their adolescent.
All in all, I
firmly
supposed that modern
women
should figure out how to balance their work
as well
as their home in order to accomplish all the works.
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