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The pie charts below illustrate the number of journal articles read per week by all students PhD students and junior lecturers at an Australian university v.1

The pie charts below illustrate the number of journal articles read per week by all students PhD students and junior lecturers at an Australian university v. 1
Education is the process of facilitating or the acquisition of knowledge, skills, values, beliefs, and habits. In this contemporary world most of the people prefer to go outside from the house to study at a university or college. Which brings up with positive as well as negative impact on students. I will discuss both the views in following paragraphs. To begin with, there is a plethora of benefits of learning overseas. First and foremost, it helps to boost student confidence level, meanwhile skills such as communication and thinking. In a case on this point, when a pupil goes foreign nation in their academic field during that time, they meet with various kinds of different human, which grows their confidence level or makes new friends. Secondly, the opportunity of getting jobs should increase. To justify, whenever a student completes their degree from another country then they are able to get a high paid job easily in their city moreover spend their life very happily. Every coin has two sides. Therefore, scholar suffers from some problems while learning in abroad. Firstly, language problems are faced by the learner, because there are lots of students who are not able to understand the international language due to that, they are not in a position to express their views and not capable of understand their academic errors. Last but not least, the person does not give proper attention towards their career, because they have to do all work own-self. Such as cooking food, part time job and soon things. In conclusion, learning in abroad has many positive effects, but it is irrefutable that it has some negative points too. Which indirect effects on individual life
Education is the process of facilitating or the acquisition of knowledge,
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skills
, values, beliefs, and habits. In this contemporary world most of the
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people
prefer to go outside from the
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house
to study at a university or college. Which brings up with
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positive
as well
as
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negative
impact on
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students
. I will discuss both the views in following paragraphs.

To
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begin
with, there is a plethora of benefits of learning overseas.
First
and foremost, it
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helps
to boost
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
confidence level, meanwhile
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
such as communication and thinking. In a case on this point, when a pupil goes foreign nation in their academic field during that time, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
with various kinds of
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different
human, which grows their confidence level or
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makes
new friends.
Secondly
, the opportunity of getting jobs should increase. To justify, whenever a
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student
completes their degree from another country then they are able to
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get
a high paid job
easily
in their city
moreover
spend their life
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very
happily
.

Every coin has two sides.
Therefore
, scholar suffers from
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some
problems while learning in abroad.
Firstly
, language problems
are faced
by the learner,
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because
there are lots of
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students
who are not able to understand the international language due to that, they are not in a position to express their views and not capable of understand their academic errors. Last
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but
not least, the person does not give proper attention towards their career,
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because
they
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have to
do all work
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own
-self. Such as cooking food,
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part time
job and
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soon
things.

In conclusion
, learning in abroad has
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many
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positive
effects,
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but
it is irrefutable that it has
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some
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negative
points too. Which indirect effects on individual
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life
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
The joy of knowing a foreign language is inexpressible. I find it really difficult to express such joy in my mother tongue.
Munia Khan

IELTS essay The pie charts below illustrate the number of journal articles read per week by all students PhD students and junior lecturers at an Australian university v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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