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Some scientists think that are intelligent life forms on other planets and messages should be sent to contact them. Other scientists think it is a bad idea and would be dangerous. Discuss both the views and give your opinion. v.1

Some scientists think that are intelligent life forms on other planets and messages should be sent to contact them. Other scientists think it is a bad idea and would be dangerous. v. 1
Extraterrestrials, that may range from single-celled organisms to beings with a civilization far more advanced than humanity may exist on other planets of the universe. Scientists do not have any evidence to prove their existence to date. According to one camp of scientists, messages should be sent to those aliens to confirm their existence; however, the other camp expresses concerns about hailing the attention of alien civilizations. I would delve into both the views in this essay. Due of over exploitation, the earth is slowly becoming uninhabitable, to begin with. In the true spirit of exploration, astrologists want to explore the space for the existence of advanced life forms which would be beneficial for us in the future. Cosmologists like Stephen hawking consider this advancement in the search of intelligent lives may get to a period in our future where we outgrow our evolutionary baggage. Furthermore, a search of extraterrestrial civilizations will make us not only technologically more proficient than we are, but more aware of the rarity and preciousness of life in the cosmos. On the other hand, there is a plethora of risks in contacting extraterrestrial scientists currently have no idea what alien life-forms might look like, or how they might respond to contact from human civilization.  Such advanced aliens would perhaps become nomads, looking to conquer and colonize whatever planets they could reach. We don't know much about aliens, but we know about humans. If we look at history, contact between humans and less intelligent organisms have often been violent and have gone badly for the less advanced. A civilization reading one of our messages could be billions of years ahead of us. If so, they will be vastly more powerful, and may not see us as any more valuable than we see bacteria. In conclusion, even though I fear that an advanced alien civilization would have no problem wiping out the human race, the desire for the search for life beyond earth outgrows the risks and I strongly agree that it would give us a commitment to live. We are alive. We are intelligent. We must search for the signs of life in this universe.
Extraterrestrials, that may range from single-celled organisms to beings with a
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civilization
far more
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advanced
than humanity may exist on other planets of the universe. Scientists do not have any evidence to prove their existence to date. According to one camp of scientists, messages should be
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sent
to those
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aliens
to confirm their existence;
however
, the other camp expresses concerns about hailing the attention of
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alien
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civilizations
. I would delve into both the views in this essay.

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Due
of over exploitation, the earth is
slowly
becoming uninhabitable, to
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begin
with. In the true spirit of exploration, astrologists want to explore the space for the existence of
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advanced
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life
forms which would be beneficial for us in the future. Cosmologists like
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Stephen hawking
consider this advancement in the
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search
of intelligent
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lives
may
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get
to a period in our future where we outgrow our evolutionary baggage.
Furthermore
, a
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search
of extraterrestrial
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civilizations
will
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make
us not
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only
technologically
more proficient than we are,
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but
more aware of the rarity and preciousness of
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life
in the cosmos.

On the other hand
, there is a plethora of
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risks
in contacting extraterrestrial scientists
currently
have no
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idea
what
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alien
life-forms might look like, or how they might respond to contact from
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human
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civilization
.  Such
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advanced
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aliens
would perhaps become nomads, looking to conquer and colonize whatever planets they could reach. We don't know much about
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aliens
,
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but
we know about
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humans
. If we look at history, contact between
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humans
and less intelligent organisms have
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often
been violent and have gone
badly
for the less
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advanced
. A
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civilization
reading one of our messages could be billions of years ahead of us. If
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so
, they will be
vastly
more powerful, and may not
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see
us as
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any more
valuable than we
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see
bacteria.

In conclusion
,
even though
I fear that an
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advanced
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alien
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civilization
would have no problem wiping out the
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human
race, the desire for the
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search
for
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life
beyond earth outgrows the
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risks
and I
strongly
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agree
that it would give us a commitment to
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live
. We are alive. We are intelligent.
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We
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must
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search
for the signs of
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life
in this universe.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some scientists think that are intelligent life forms on other planets and messages should be sent to contact them. Other scientists think it is a bad idea and would be dangerous. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
359 words
7.5
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