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The picture below shows the recycling process of wasted glass bottles. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The picture below shows the recycling process of wasted glass bottles.
The trend of online shopping has gradually increased over time. Online purchase of stuffs is beneficial owing to varieties of goods display, and convenience of the buyer, although there exist some associated drawbacks. Online shopping is rising because of its pluses. One of the merits of shopping online is the level of convenience experienced. Often times, people shop during their relaxation periods, outside stress or work. For instance, most people usually do their shopping from the comfort of their homes, or even while seeing a movie. Another reason is the display of varieties of products available. The buyer is sometimes faced with the challenge of making a decision of choice. In addition, online shopping reduces stress and saves time. As against the experience in the contemporary market, the walk from one shop to the other in search of the goods that suits them is lowered when buying online. On the other hand, there exist some limitations of purchasing items from cyber shops. Inabilities to properly examine and appreciate the product are one of the drawbacks involved. This is because the sellers only post photographs of the goods on sale based on their personal discretion. For example, only one side of the product is usually posted, while other features are not showcased. Furthermore, online goods are more expensive. This is often due to the additional fee incurred for their shopping. For example, for any fashion item ordered from Jumia, an additional shipping fee of eight hundred Naira is added to the actual price. Additionally, online shopping takes a longer delivery period. Depending on the location of the seller, the delivery of online goods can take a very long time, between weeks to months. In conclusion, there are a number of advantages in purchasing goods via internet service, but the disadvantages, such as cost ineffective of the products, and improperly displayed of items online are inevitable. In my opinion, shopping from the contemporary market is more profiting when compared to shopping online.
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has
gradually
increased over
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time
.
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Online
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purchase
of stuffs is beneficial owing to varieties of
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goods
display, and convenience of the buyer, although there exist
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some
associated drawbacks.

Online
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shopping
is rising
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because
of its pluses. One of the merits of
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shopping
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online
is the level of convenience experienced.
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Often
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times
,
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people
shop during their relaxation periods, outside
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stress
or work.
For instance
, most
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people
usually
do their
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shopping
from the comfort of their homes, or even while seeing a movie. Another reason is the display of varieties of
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products
available. The buyer is
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sometimes
faced with the challenge of making a decision of choice.
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,
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online
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shopping
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reduces
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stress
and saves
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time
. As against the experience in the contemporary market, the walk from one shop to the other in search of the
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goods
that suits them
is lowered
when buying online.

On the other hand
, there exist
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some
limitations of purchasing items from cyber shops. Inabilities to
properly
examine and appreciate the
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product
are one of the drawbacks involved. This is
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because
the sellers
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only
post photographs of the
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goods
on sale based on their personal discretion.
For example
,
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only
one side of the
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product
is
usually
posted, while other features are not showcased.
Furthermore
,
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online
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goods
are more expensive. This is
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often
due to the additional fee incurred for their
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shopping
.
For example
, for any fashion item ordered from
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Jumia
, an additional shipping fee of eight hundred
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is
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added
to the actual price.
Additionally
,
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online
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shopping
takes a longer delivery period. Depending on the location of the seller, the delivery of
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online
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goods
can take a
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very
long
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time
, between weeks to months.

In conclusion
, there are a number of advantages in purchasing
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goods
via internet service,
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but
the disadvantages, such as cost ineffective of the
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products
, and
improperly
displayed of items
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online
are inevitable. In my opinion,
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shopping
from the contemporary market is more profiting when compared to
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shopping
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online
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay The picture below shows the recycling process of wasted glass bottles.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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