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The flowchart below shows the process of making recycled bottles. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The flowchart below shows the process of making recycled bottles.
Opinions Diverge greatly about genetically modified crops. Although there are some advantages, I would argue that drawbacks overshadow the positive aspects. On one hand, I understand why some people believe that transgenic fare brings benefits. First, it represents a low cost of production. A crop could be genetically modified having special properties against mosquitos and other plagues. Subsequently, less insecticide has to be used to produce more. Also, biological properties could be improved. Therefore, garlic would be able to grow faster, cutting down the time of harvest. Second, there are multiple possibilities: new flavours, colours, size, and many other factors to be added to our current food selection, letting us live the whole experience. However, these advantages cannot overshadow the disadvantages. According to recent researches, current data is insufficient to prove that transgenic engineering has not any secondary consequence. It is known by a great part of the Scientific’s community the involved risk that it will cause to DNA. Because of that, throughout the next years, new diseases will be found in society as a consequence of modified genes. It is our responsibility to make enough experimentation to guarantee its harmless. Furthermore and even more important, transgenic food opens the door to a vast pool of possibilities, the next step will be modifications in human genetics. It is necessary to take consciousness of responsibility in nature and life. By way of conclusion, I personally believe that through all the benefits that genetically modified food represents a huge risk that is latent and essential to have more data in order to dissipate all possible problems that it represents.
Opinions Diverge
greatly
about
genetically
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
modified
crops. Although there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
advantages, I would argue that drawbacks overshadow the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
aspects.

On one hand, I understand why
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believe that transgenic fare brings benefits.
First
, it represents a low cost of production. A crop could be
genetically
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
modified
having special properties against
Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "mosquitoes", the plural form of the noun 'mosquito'?
mosquitos
and other plagues.
Subsequently
, less insecticide
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
has to
be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to produce more.
Also
, biological properties could be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
.
Therefore
, garlic would be able to grow faster, cutting down the time of harvest. Second, there are multiple possibilities: new
Possible spelling mistake. 'flavours' is British English.
flavours
,
Possible spelling mistake. 'colours' is British English.
colours
, size, and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
other factors to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
to our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
food selection, letting us
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
the whole experience.

However
, these advantages cannot overshadow the disadvantages. According to recent researches,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
data is insufficient to prove that transgenic engineering has not any secondary consequence. It
is known
by a great part of the Scientific’s community the involved
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
that it will cause to DNA.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
of that, throughout the
next
years, new diseases will
be found
in society as a consequence of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
modified
genes. It is our responsibility to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
experimentation to guarantee its harmless.
Furthermore
and even more
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
, transgenic food opens the door to a vast pool of possibilities, the
next
step will be modifications in human genetics. It is necessary to take consciousness of responsibility in nature and life.

By way of conclusion, I
personally
believe that through all the benefits that
genetically
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
modified
food represents a huge
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
that is
latent and essential to have more data in order to dissipate all possible problems that it represents.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The flowchart below shows the process of making recycled bottles.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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