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The performance of staff can have a significant impact on the success of a company. What can companies do to increase staff productivity. v.3

The performance of staff can have a significant impact on the success of a company. What can companies do to increase staff productivity. v. 3
In modern world, every business wants devotion and this devotion comes from the employees who work in that business or companies and in return every hard worker person want some credit for the work he/she is doing. Its company responsibility to give credit to their staff members so that their dedication of work increased with time. First of all, if we look around of our self, so it will be clear to us that every money making things are run by different types of people. For example, if there were hard working teachers in an education institute and they are giving their full effort in maintaining high quality of education in that school or college, and as a result it will gain its importance and in this way the credit goes to its staff members. Moreover, a company is always get success with the help of hardworking employs. For instance, when their is good relation between bank staff and costumers, it gives a good result in the development of bank. In return, it’s the responsibility of a company or institute to give credit to their employees for the efforts they are providing to their owners. For example, increase their salaries, give them bonuses for their extra hardships, provide them proper promotions and last but not the least appreciate them in every steps they are taking in favor of their working place.
In modern world, every business wants devotion and this devotion
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comes
from the employees who work in that business or
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companies
and in return every
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hard
worker person want
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some
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credit
for the work he/she is doing. Its
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company
responsibility to
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give
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credit
to their staff members
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so
that their dedication of work increased with time.

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First of all
, if we look around of our self,
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so
it will be
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clear
to us that every money making things
are run
by
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different
types of
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people
.
For example
, if there were
This expression is normally spelled as one or with hyphen.
hard working
teachers in an education
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
institute and
they are giving their full effort in maintaining high quality of education in that school or college, and
as a result
it will gain its importance and in this way the
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credit
goes to its staff members.

Moreover
, a
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company
is always
Consider using a past participle here: "got", "gotten".
get
success with the
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help
of hardworking employs.
For instance
, when
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their
is
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good
relation between bank staff and costumers, it
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gives
a
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good
result in the development of bank.

In return, it’s the responsibility of a
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company
or institute to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
give
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
credit
to their employees for the efforts they are providing to their owners.
For example
, increase their salaries,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
give
them bonuses for their extra hardships, provide them proper promotions and last
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
not the least appreciate them in every
The noun should be probably in the singular form: "step"?
steps
they are taking in favor of their working place.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay The performance of staff can have a significant impact on the success of a company. What can companies do to increase staff productivity. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
231 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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