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The performance of staff can have a significant impact on the success of a company. What can companies do to increase staff productivity. v.1

The performance of staff can have a significant impact on the success of a company. What can companies do to increase staff productivity. v. 1
School subjects are gaining public interests these days. Certain subjects are needed more in society than others which may as well be eradicated from school curriculums. Some proponents believe History as against Science and technology are believed to be more crucial while others think otherwise. While there are reasons for supporting science and technology, I believe history helps us know the wrong steps to avoid today and previous best practices. On the one hand, those who think history is most necessary, believe that history provides us with lessons from the past. In other words, we believe we cannot make the same mistakes if we know a lot more about previous occurrences. For instance, we cannot spend lots of time creating bacteria fighting agents because we already studied history which shows how it was created. This results in spending lesser time in manufacturing products. Also, in the course of producing a product, history helps us to know previous best practices. This means that we would know how best to compete in the market place. This consequently ensures that we spend lesser costs in production of goods and services. On the other hand, those who think science and technology are more important argue that this is key for new discoveries. This means that with science, we can explore our world more than ever before which leads to better observations and opportunities for new discoveries. This would make the world a better place. Again, science and technology increases knowledge. In other words, they are the means by which knowledge is observed, noted, transferred and acquired. For example, the devices developed using their techniques are used in the field of medicine and this have been of great help. In conclusion, there is the ongoing debate of which subjects are most important. While I support that history has its importance, it should be well noted that science and technology helps with new discoveries and increases knowledge.
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are needed
more in society than others which may
as well
be eradicated
from school curriculums.
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and
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technology
are believed
to be more crucial while others
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. While there are reasons for supporting
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science
and
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technology
, I
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believe
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history
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helps
us
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know
the
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wrong
steps to avoid
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today
and previous best practices.

On the one hand, those who
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think
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history
is most necessary,
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believe
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history
provides us with lessons from the past. In
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words, we
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believe
we cannot
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know
a lot more about previous occurrences.
For instance
, we cannot spend lots of time creating bacteria fighting agents
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because
we already studied
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history
which
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shows
how it
was created
. This results in spending lesser time in manufacturing products.
Also
, in the course of producing a product,
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history
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helps
us to
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know
previous best practices. This means that we would
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know
how best to compete in the market place. This
consequently
ensures that we spend lesser costs in production of
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goods
and services.

On the
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other
hand, those who
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think
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science
and
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are more
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important
argue that this is key for new discoveries. This means that with
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science
, we can explore our world more than ever
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before
which leads to better observations and opportunities for new discoveries. This would
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make
the world a better place. Again,
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science
and
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technology
increases knowledge. In
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other
words, they are the means by which knowledge
is observed
, noted, transferred and acquired.
For example
, the devices developed using their techniques are
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used
in the field of medicine and
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this have
been of great
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help
.

In conclusion
, there is the ongoing debate of which subjects are most
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important
. While I support that
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history
has its importance, it should be well noted that
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science
and
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technology
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
with new discoveries and increases knowledge.
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IELTS essay The performance of staff can have a significant impact on the success of a company. What can companies do to increase staff productivity. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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