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The people think that the government should invest money in arts and cultural events, while others believe that government should spend money on more important things. discuss both side of view and give your opinion. v.2

The people think that the government should invest money in arts and cultural events, while others believe that government should spend money on more important things. v. 2
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topic asserts that; governor- agencies, should
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have to
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money
for prominent things;
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art
and
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traditiona
or not? In this essay, I am going to examine this question from both points of view.

On one side, there is a group of
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people
who believe that authorities had
been invested
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money
on the tradition. It was being rose- up economy of nation,
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because
, the numerous overseas tourist have visit in that era, and, paid the ticket amount of
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seen
that
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event
.
In addition
to this, An
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art
and tradition is part and parcel of everyone life,
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so
,
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government
is responsible for making a wonderful
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art
and cultural museum in the nation. The
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best
epitome of this is, Amritsar is one accustom city of Punjab,
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they authorities
have been already spent a
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plenty
of
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money
to preserve culture and
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art
. This is
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best
way to attract the numerous
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people
onwards;
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Kalli
a Neal a
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bagh
, partition museum, and golden temple Amritsar, that always wonderful places in the world to preservation of
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art
and cultural gallery.

Contrary to this, there is an opposing group of
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people
who reveal that, the governor-agency could be
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spend
minefields development of nation. It will
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providing
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lot of
facility of
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people
; hospital, school, and,
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so
on,
however
,
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best
suggestion
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to built
a developed era, a
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good
illustration of this is
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government
have been responsible to construct a
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good
roads and grown- up the poverty of
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own
his country.
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moreover
, The
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best
epitome of this is the Hindustan time
was conducted
survey of all state of India
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a,
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but
, realize that happens state
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government
had
been provided
a numerous facility in the state and developed the era.

Nevertheless
, weighing both the opinions, I reckon that there is no single conclusion
still
, I take this ground that an effective clap require both
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use
of hands the administration have been responsible for development of cities, and, should have
also
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prevent
the museum of
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art
gallery and tradition for seeing that new- generation.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Mistakes

IELTS essay The people think that the government should invest money in arts and cultural events, while others believe that government should spend money on more important things. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
371 words
6.0
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