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In many countries plastic bags are the main source of rubbish causing pollution in oceans and on land, therefore, they should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree. v.2

In many countries plastic bags are the main source of rubbish causing pollution in oceans and on land, therefore, they should be banned. v. 2
With the rise in modernization, a man has transformed his life tremendously. He has progressed from walking barefooted in the jungles to take first step on the moon. Nevertheless, there are some issues which remains irrevocable and as complex as ever. For instance, the given topic asserts that should the use of polythene bags be restricted to curb the problem of pollution related to waste material on land and water bodies? Through this essay, I shall explore the dimensions of this topic with illustration and examples and shape my opinion by the end. It is common assertion that plastic bags are non-biodegradable material. As a result, responsible for arising obstacles related to pollution. A good illustration of this is, in present scenerio, many countries utilise polythene bags to carry goods such as, clothes, vegetables or fruits. Therefore, after consuming eatables they discard them mainy on land or water. Consequently, responsible for producing soil as well as water pollution. Moreover, in homes massive amount of plastic products are used. the best epitome of this is the use of plastic containers for storage. As they are not decomposed related to cause pollution. Contrary to this, there is an opposing group of people who believe that plastic bags are not only the material causing water and soil pollution. There are plethora of other factors which produce it. Primary one is, releasing of chemical fertilizers for example, pesticides, insecticides are also responsible for polluting land and water bodies. Nevertheless, weighing both the options, I pen down saying that there is no single conclusion. Still, I make this ground that an effective clap requires both use of hands. Nodoubt, plastic bags are non-biodegradable cause pollution. But, there are voluminous factors which create pollution of land and water. So, this obstacle will be overcome by creating the awareness among the people regarding the bad impact of using plastic bags on natural resources. Therefore, I personally reckon that this problem will be overcome by the method I mentioned above not only by banned them.
With the rise in modernization, a
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man
has transformed his life
tremendously
. He has progressed from walking barefooted in the jungles to take
first
step on the moon.
Nevertheless
, there are
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some
issues which remains irrevocable and as complex as ever.
For instance
, the
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given
topic asserts that should the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of polythene
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bags
be restricted
to curb the problem of
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pollution
related to waste material on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
land
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
bodies? Through this essay, I shall explore the dimensions of this topic with illustration and examples and shape my opinion by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
.

It is common assertion that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
are non-biodegradable material.
As a result
, responsible for arising obstacles related to
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pollution
. A
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good
illustration of this is, in present
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scenerio
,
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many
countries
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utilise
polythene
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bags
to carry
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goods
such as, clothes, vegetables or fruits.
Therefore
, after consuming eatables they discard them
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mainy
on
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land
or
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water
.
Consequently
, responsible for producing soil
as well
as
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water
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pollution
.
Moreover
, in homes massive amount of
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plastic
products are
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used
.
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the
best epitome of this is the
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use
of
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plastic
containers for storage.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
they are not decomposed related to cause pollution.

Contrary to this, there is an opposing group of
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people
who believe that
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plastic
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bags
are not
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only
the material causing
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water
and soil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
. There are plethora of other factors which produce it. Primary one is, releasing of chemical fertilizers
for example
, pesticides, insecticides are
also
responsible for polluting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
land
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
bodies.

Nevertheless
, weighing both the options, I pen down saying that there is no single conclusion.
Still
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
this ground that an effective clap requires both
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use
of hands.
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Nodoubt
,
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plastic
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bags
are non-biodegradable cause
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pollution
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
, there are voluminous factors which create
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pollution
of
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land
and
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water
.
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So
, this obstacle will
be overcome
by creating the awareness among the
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people
regarding the
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bad
impact of using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
on natural resources.
Therefore
, I
personally
reckon that this problem will
be overcome
by the method I mentioned above not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
by banned them.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay In many countries plastic bags are the main source of rubbish causing pollution in oceans and on land, therefore, they should be banned. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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