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The number of people being sent to prison is increasing year on year While some people believe prisons are the best way to tackle crime others suggest that community service is successful Discuss both views and give your own opinion v.1

The number of people being sent to prison is increasing year on year While some people believe prisons are the best way to tackle crime others suggest that community service is successful 1
It is argued that gaining access into the university is tasking for both the well-to-do and the poor. This essay agrees that the wealthy and the less-privileged face challenges securing entrance into colleges. This is so because universities give admission on merit and also the number of spaces available is far less than the total number of applicants Firstly, one major criterion for university entry is academic merit. Regardless of how much money students have, their grades have to be of a minimum standard, depending on the course of choice, before being considered for a slot in the school. The college administration has no first-hand information of the financial buoyancy of the students, admissions are handed out solely based on examination results of the students. For example, in Nigeria, admission criteria for all universities are based on two examinations WAEC and JAMB and the cutoff marks vary, depending on the course of study. Medicine and accounting for instance stand at 80% and 50% respectively. Secondly, the number of available spaces in the universities is limited in comparison to the amount of students that apply. There are massive amounts of students sending out an application to colleges every year, this includes the children from affluent homes and those that are not, but unfortunately, the capacity of the schools in regards to infrastructure are not many. As a result of this, there is an equal reduction in the chances of both groups of people gaining entrance into these schools. For example, in 2019, Nigeria witnessed 66, 000 university applicants, but only 30000 students were taken which accounts for just 45% of all the applicants. In conclusion, the people that are financially buoyant face the same difficulty as those who are not in order to secure a seat in colleges and this is due to the fact that they both have to succeed academically to make the merit list and also face the challenge of inadequate availability of spaces in the schools.
It
is argued
that gaining access into the
university
is tasking for both the well-to-do and the poor. This essay
agrees
that the wealthy and the less-privileged face challenges securing entrance into colleges. This is
so
because
universities
give admission on merit and
also
the number of spaces available is far less than the total number of
applicants


Firstly
, one major criterion for
university
entry is academic merit. Regardless of how much money
students
have, their grades
have to
be of a minimum standard, depending on the course of choice,
before
being considered
for a slot in the
school
. The college administration has no
first
-hand information of the financial buoyancy of the
students
, admissions
are handed
out
solely
based on examination results of the
students
.
For example
, in Nigeria, admission criteria for all
universities
are based
on two examinations WAEC and JAMB and the cutoff marks vary, depending on the course of study. Medicine and accounting
for instance
stand at 80% and 50%
respectively
.

Secondly
, the number of available spaces in the
universities
is limited
in comparison
to the amount of
students
that apply. There are massive amounts of
students
sending out an application to colleges every year, this includes the children from affluent homes and those that are not,
but
unfortunately, the capacity of the
schools
in regards to
infrastructure are not
many
.
As a result
of this, there is an equal reduction in the chances of both groups of
people
gaining entrance into these
schools
.
For example
, in 2019, Nigeria witnessed 66, 000
university
applicants,
but
only
30000
students
were taken
which accounts for
just
45% of all the applicants.

In conclusion
, the
people
that are
financially
buoyant face the same difficulty as those who are not in order to secure a seat in colleges and
this is due to the fact that
they both
have to
succeed
academically
to
make
the merit list and
also
face the challenge of inadequate availability of spaces in the
schools
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The number of people being sent to prison is increasing year on year While some people believe prisons are the best way to tackle crime others suggest that community service is successful 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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