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In some countries, people who commit less serious crimes are made to undertake community service* instead of a prison sentence. Some people believe that all people who have committed a crime should be sent to prison. Do you agree or disagree? *compulsory wo v.2

In some countries, people who commit less serious crimes are made to undertake community service* instead of a prison sentence. Some people believe that all people who have committed a crime should be sent to prison. *compulsory wo v. 2
Some individuals opine that the most vital aspect when designing a building is its function rather than its outer aesthetics. I somewhat agree with this viewpoint as although a good-looking building enhances the beauty of its surroundings, without meeting its basic function, it would be a waste. On the one hand, a building that has an appealing appearance may be a source of beautification of its locality that may be able to encourage people to visit it as it may serve as an incentive for tourism, leisure or work. For example, the bath houses of Brighton are well-known for their bright and colourful designs and promote tourism in the state of Victoria. Similarly, attractive university campuses and office spaces are deemed to be popular study and work destinations among young adults. However, the function of a building is of pivotal importance when considering its design. A building needs to accommodate the needs of its owners, residents and patrons. Specifically, one basic necessity of any building is safety, that is, it needs to be sturdy and durable. However, nowadays, there are many fashionable styles of buildings that compromise their stability and safety. For example, in India, an architectural firm gained popularity for its one-of-a-kind designs and, a few years later the designs were claimed as unsafe when many of the buildings collapsed during a minor earthquake. As a result, several resources were wasted and many lives were endangered in light of the importance given to an outward appearance of the buildings over their basic functionality. In conclusion, I agree to some extent that the purpose of a building is of utmost importance, instead of the external aspects when designing it, as without serving the primary functions, a building would be a waste of essential resources and even risky.
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Some
individuals opine that the most vital aspect when designing a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
is its
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
function
rather
than its outer aesthetics. I somewhat
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this viewpoint as although a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
-looking
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
enhances the beauty of its surroundings, without meeting its basic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
function
, it would be a waste.

On the one hand, a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
that has an appealing appearance may be a source of beautification of its locality that may be able to encourage
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to visit it as it may serve as an incentive for tourism, leisure or work.
For example
, the bath
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houses
of Brighton are well-known for their bright and
Possible spelling mistake. 'colourful' is British English.
colourful
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
designs
and promote tourism in the state of Victoria.
Similarly
, attractive university campuses and office spaces
are deemed
to be popular study and work destinations among young adults.

However
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
function
of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
is of pivotal importance when considering its
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
design
. A
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
needs to accommodate the needs of its owners, residents and patrons.
Specifically
, one basic necessity of any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
is safety,
that is
, it needs to be sturdy and durable.
However
, nowadays, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
fashionable styles of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
that compromise their stability and safety.
For example
, in India, an architectural firm gained popularity for its one-of-a-kind
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
designs
and, a few years later the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
designs
were claimed
as unsafe when
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
collapsed during a minor earthquake.
As a result
, several resources
were wasted
and
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many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
were endangered
in light of the importance
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
to an outward appearance of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
over their basic functionality.

In conclusion
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
extent that the purpose of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
is of utmost importance,
instead
of the external aspects when designing it, as without serving the primary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
functions
, a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
would be a waste of essential resources and even risky.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay In some countries, people who commit less serious crimes are made to undertake community service* instead of a prison sentence. Some people believe that all people who have committed a crime should be sent to prison. *compulsory wo v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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