The most important thing about a job is how much money you earn in that job. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.1
The most important thing about a job is how much money you earn in that job.   v. 1
Some people choose high paying jobs.
Others prefer jobs they find satisfying even if the salary is low.
While I admit that it is important to earn enough to make a living, in my opinion, job satisfaction is more important than the size of the pay package.
Job satisfaction increases productivity.
If people like their jobs, no one has to force them to go to work.
No one has to supervise them.
They will perform their job on their own and with utmost interest and concentration.
This interest that they show will automatically improve the results and help them achieve more in less time.
By contrast, people who choose a particular job just because it is paying well will find it rather difficult to stay motivated.
They have to push themselves to work every morning.
Because of this lack of interest in the job, they make more errors and take longer to finish tasks.
As a result, they have to stay late at the office.
The long working hours will eventually affect their health and family life.
Take, for instance, the case of IT professionals.
The IT industry pays well, but the jobs are extremely stressful and demanding.
Someone who chooses a job in this industry just because the salaries are good will eventually burn out unable to cope with the pressures of the job.
On the flip side, rewarding jobs may not always pay well at the beginning.
But over time, the workers' enthusiasm and dedication will make the job a lucrative career option.
For example, there are lots of people who turned their hobbies into successful career options.
It was their love for the job that ultimately helped them.
To conclude, job satisfaction is certainly more important than the money earned.
If people love their job, eventually, they will also earn well. 
 Some
  people
 choose high paying jobs.
Others prefer  
jobs
 they find satisfying even if the salary is low.
While I admit that it is  
important
 to earn  
enough
 to  
make
 a living, in my opinion,  
job
 satisfaction is more  
important
 than the size of the pay package.
Job satisfaction increases productivity.
If  
people
 like their  
jobs
, no one  
has to
 force them to go to work.
No one  
has to
 supervise them.
They will perform their  
job
 on their  
own
 and with utmost interest and concentration.
This interest that they  
show
 will  
automatically
  improve
 the results and  
help
 them achieve more in less time.
By contrast,  
people
 who choose a particular  
job
  just
  because
 it is paying  
well
 will find it  
rather
 difficult to stay motivated.
They  
have to
 push themselves to work every morning. 
Because of this
 lack of interest in the  
job
, they  
make
 more errors and take longer to finish tasks. 
As a result
, they  
have to
 stay late at the office.
The long working hours will  
eventually
 affect their health and family life.
Take,  
for instance
, the case of IT professionals.
The IT industry pays  
well
,  
but
 the  
jobs
 are  
extremely
 stressful and demanding.
Someone who chooses a  
job
 in this industry  
just
  because
 the salaries are  
good
 will  
eventually
 burn out unable to cope with the pressures of the job.
On the flip side, rewarding  
jobs
 may not always pay  
well
 at the beginning. 
But
 over time, the workers' enthusiasm and dedication will  
make
 the  
job
 a lucrative career option. 
For example
, there are lots of  
people
 who turned their hobbies into successful career options.
It was their  
love
 for the  
job
 that  
ultimately
  helped
 them. 
To conclude
,  
job
 satisfaction is  
certainly
 more  
important
 than the money earned.
If  
people
  love
 their  
job
,  
eventually
, they will  
also
 earn  
well
. 
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