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The most important consideration when choosing any career or job is having a high income. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

Before choosing a career or a job people tend to consider the job opportunites and demands they might get after pursuing a certain course or applying for a certain job. Each and every country has different pay checks and each and every households have different needs or motives. The monetary value is without a doubt very important and necessary for and individual's survival in this rapidly fast moving world. But, we can't just ignore the other factors that will be coming into an individual's life after choosing a career or applying for a job. If we talk about choosing career, An individual should be passionate about the career he/she is opting. Just because higher monetary value is involved an individual should not choose a career. The monetary part will fade away after sometimes and that is where the troubles begins. People lose interest, get anxiety and feel depressed because they are not enjoying themselves in a particular line of career. For Instance, If an individual is working as a Manager in an MNC and he/she gets an opportunity to work as a chef somewhere else but they have no idea about cooking and are not passionate about cooking and they've accepted the said job just for sake of money then they would fail miserably. Also, before choosing a career an individual should acknowledge whether the career path they are choosing is ethical or not. For example, Gambling has lots of money involved, you win big and you lose big but that doesn't mean an individual can switch careers, because here in India, gambling is illegal. Talking about the job aspect, everyone is working to survive, if not everyone, then most of us, definitely yes. We do consider money before choosing a job. There is nothing wrong with it but the risks involved are too high. Before applying for a job, an individual should consider the value that the job would give it to him/her. These values can be in terms of emotions and experience and money, and then consider the amount of contribution they can give back to the company. These days, we the people, give so much importance to the monetary terms that we end up doing things we never wanted or dreamt of doing and we end up getting lonely and get depressed. Happiness and satisfaction are most important and most ignored parts of our lives. I Agree, that we consider the high pay before choosing a job and a career. To be honest, this is the only factor we consider. But we should always remember that the money will fade away, the value of money will fade away by time, So we should focus on the values that we get from the job or career would give to us and what will we give in return. For Instance, Sachin Tendulkar, Great indian batsman, succeeded only because he was passionate about cricket, not because he considered the money. His love and honesty for cricket led him to where he is today. This is how the universe works. Satisfaction and Love for the career or job is important, money will get through.
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choosing a
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career
or a
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job
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people
tend to
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consider
the
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opportunites
and demands they might
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get
after pursuing a certain course or applying for a certain
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job
. Each and every country has
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different
pay
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checks
and each and every
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households
have
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different
needs or motives. The
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monetary
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value
is without a doubt
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very
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important
and necessary for and individual's survival in this
rapidly
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fast
moving world.
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, we can't
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ignore
the other factors that will be coming into an individual's life after choosing a
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career
or applying for a job.

If we talk about choosing
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career
, An
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individual
should be passionate about the
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career
he/she is opting.
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because
higher
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monetary
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value
is involved
an
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individual
should not choose a
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career
. The
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monetary
part will fade away after
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sometimes
and
that is
where the troubles
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begins
.
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People
lose interest,
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get
anxiety and feel depressed
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because
they are not enjoying themselves in a particular line of
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career
.
For Instance
, If an
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individual
is working as a Manager in an MNC and he/she
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gets
an opportunity to work as a chef somewhere else
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but
they have no
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idea
about cooking and are not passionate about
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cooking and
they've
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accepted
the said
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job
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just
for sake of
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money
then they would fail
miserably
.
Also
,
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before
choosing a
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career
an
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individual
should acknowledge whether the
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career
path they are choosing is ethical or not.
For example
, Gambling has lots of
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money
involved, you win
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big and
you lose
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big
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but
that doesn't mean an
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individual
can switch
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careers
,
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because
here in India, gambling is illegal.

Talking about the
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job
aspect, everyone is working to survive, if not everyone, then most of us, definitely yes. We do
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consider
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money
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before
choosing a
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job
. There is nothing
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wrong
with
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it
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but
the
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risks
involved are too high.
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Before
applying for a
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job
, an
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individual
should
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consider
the
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value
that the
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job
would
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give
it to him/her. These values can be in terms of emotions and experience and
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money
, and then
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consider
the amount of contribution they can
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give
back to the
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company
. These days, we the
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people
,
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give
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so
much importance to the
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monetary
terms that we
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end
up doing things we never wanted or dreamt of
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doing and
we
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end
up getting lonely and
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get
depressed. Happiness and satisfaction are most
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important
and most
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ignored
parts of our
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lives
.

I
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Agree
, that we
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consider
the high pay
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before
choosing a
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job
and a
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career
. To be honest, this is the
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only
factor we
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consider
.
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But
we should always remember that the
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money
will fade away, the
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value
of
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money
will fade away by time,
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So
we should focus on the values that we
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get
from the
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job
or
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career
would
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give
to us and what will we
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give
in return.

For Instance
,
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Sachin
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Tendulkar
, Great
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indian
batsman, succeeded
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only
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because
he was passionate about cricket, not
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because
he considered the
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money
. His
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love
and honesty for cricket led him to where he is
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today
. This is how the universe works. Satisfaction and
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Love
for the
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career
or
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job
is
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important
,
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money
will
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get
through.
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IELTS essay The most important consideration when choosing any career or job is having a high income.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
523 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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