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The media should limit how much bad news they report because it discourages people from doing activities which usually involve very little risk. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

The media should limit how much bad news they report because it discourages people from doing activities which usually involve very little risk. v. 1
Nowadays, the coverage of media involves violent crime and natural disaster. Although restricting negative information on the media can prevent people from trapping into anxiety and panic, I believe that the mass media should inform people about what happened in the world and their communities. There is no doubt that the media should select appropriate news when they announce the public. This is because the media spread many sensational crimes and exaggerate reports to attract their audiences and maximize their profits. As a result, ordinary people lacking the judging ability will feel insecure and pessimistic about the neighbourhood they reside, meanwhile, there will be distrust and suspicion among the public. However, banning all the bad news reported on the media is unrealistic and unfeasible, and the purpose of imposing restrictions on bad news is not to encourage people to participate in risky activities. If there is no source of negative information, people might indulge in an illusion that the world is safe and peaceful, so when they face impending diseases, they can feel overwhelmed. A good example of communication is America’s centres for Disease Control, which promptly issued a clear and unambiguous warning about the outbreak of pandemics and some precautions on February 25th, and this report has prevented people from involving in some risky activities, such as going outside without wearing a mask and join a public event. In conclusion, the main aim of limiting bad news revealed on the reporting is to prepare the public for upcoming or potential danger, instead of spreading mistrust and fear. Therefore, the media should be aware of reports’ influences on the public and restricting them appropriately.
Nowadays, the coverage of
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involves violent crime and natural disaster. Although restricting
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negative
information on the
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media
can
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prevent
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people
from trapping into anxiety and panic, I believe that the mass
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media
should inform
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people
about what happened in the world and their communities.

There is no doubt that the
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media
should select appropriate
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news
when they announce the
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public
. This is
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because
the
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media
spread
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many
sensational crimes and exaggerate reports to attract their audiences and maximize their profits.
As a result
, ordinary
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people
lacking the judging ability will feel insecure and pessimistic about the
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neighbourhood
they reside, meanwhile, there will be distrust and suspicion among the public.

However
, banning all the
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bad
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news
reported on the
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media
is unrealistic and unfeasible, and the purpose of imposing restrictions on
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bad
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news
is not to encourage
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people
to participate in risky activities. If there is no source of
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negative
information,
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people
might indulge in an illusion that the world is safe and peaceful,
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so
when they face impending diseases, they can feel overwhelmed. A
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good
example of communication is America’s
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centres
for Disease Control, which
promptly
issued a
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clear
and unambiguous warning about the outbreak of pandemics and
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some
precautions on February 25th, and this report has
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prevented
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people
from involving in
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some
risky activities, such as going outside without wearing a mask and
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join
a
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public
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event
.

In conclusion
, the main aim of limiting
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bad
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news
revealed on the reporting is to prepare the
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public
for upcoming or potential
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danger
,
instead
of spreading mistrust and fear.
Therefore
, the
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media
should be aware of reports’ influences on the
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public
and restricting them
appropriately
.
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21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay The media should limit how much bad news they report because it discourages people from doing activities which usually involve very little risk. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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