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The media should limit how much bad news they report because it discourage people from doing activities which usually involve very little risk. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

The media should limit how much bad news they report because it discourage people from doing activities which usually involve very little risk. v. 2
Most news reports tend to be sensational, shocking and unpleasant. However, I believe we have a right to know what is happening in the world and I do not believe that the media should restrict what they tell us. People who argue that the media should not report so much bad news have one main reason for this opinion. They suggest that bad news discourages people from doing things which are normally safe, for instance crime rates may be a major factor in discouraging people from visiting a city. Another example is when a plane crashes and many people stop flying for a while, even thought it was one of the safest ways to travel. As a result of these reactions, businesses suffer because people become frightened of doing things they previously thought were harmless. On the other hand, there are strong reasons for arguing that the media should not limit their reporting. Firstly, people have to be informed so that they can then take responsible decisions. Also, people have to be able to decide for themselves what risks are involved in doing a particular activity. For example, when there has been an accident on the motorway, I do not stop driving, although I usually drive more carefully for a few days, especially if the case of the accident was the weather. In short, I think the media have a duty to report all important events. If we do not receive information of this type, we cannot make responsible decisions about what we do, and this reduces our freedom to act in a way which is best for us.
Most news reports tend to be sensational, shocking and unpleasant.
However
, I believe we have a right to know what is happening in the world and I do not believe that the
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media
should restrict what they
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tell
us.

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People
who argue that the
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media
should not report
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so
much
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bad
news have one main reason for this opinion. They suggest that
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bad
news discourages
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people
from doing things which are
normally
safe,
for instance
crime rates may be a major factor in discouraging
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people
from visiting a city. Another example is when a
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plane
crashes and
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many
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people
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stop
flying for a while, even
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thought
it was one of the safest ways to travel.
As a result
of these reactions, businesses suffer
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because
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people
become frightened of doing things they previously
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thought
were harmless.

On the other hand
, there are strong reasons for arguing that the
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media
should not limit their reporting.
Firstly
,
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people
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have to
be informed
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so
that they can then take responsible decisions.
Also
,
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people
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
be able to decide for themselves what
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risks
are involved
in doing a particular activity.
For example
, when there has been an accident on the motorway, I do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
driving, although I
usually
drive more
carefully
for a few days,
especially
if the case of the accident was the weather.

In short, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
the
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media
have a duty to report all
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important
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events
. If we do not receive information of this type, we cannot
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
responsible decisions about what we do, and this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduces
our freedom to act in a way which is best for us.
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9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The media should limit how much bad news they report because it discourage people from doing activities which usually involve very little risk. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 9.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 9.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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