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Governments should spend money on railways ratherthan roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

Governments should spend money on railways ratherthan roads. with this statement? v. 1
It is often argued that to solve the climate issue is an enormous task for the individual countries and people. We have to take the help of each other to solve this problem. This essay completely disagrees with this statement because we need to take responsibility on the individual basis of our environment and plant more trees as much as we can. To begin with, one of the best ways to make our environment better is that we need to take responsibility for our surroundings. We have to use the proper garbage system to throw our waste, and states need to make the proper garbage system and force people to follow that system, and take the action against whom, who does not follow the guidelines of the government. And states should also make the proper recycling system as well, so the waste does consume in the betterment of society. For example, there is a report that says that if we just take care of our surrounding it will be enough for making the whole environment better. Secondly, we need to plant trees as much as we can and spread awareness about the merits of planting trees. Trees reduce the temperature of the environment where they planted and also provide us with oxygen and fresh environment. They prevent us to become the victim of heatstroke, thus we need to aware people about this. For instance, after heatstroke hit Pakistan in 2015, Current Prime Minister of Pakistan, Imran Khan, who was at that time, not the Prime Minister, initiated the campaign of 1 billion trees in one of the states of Pakistan that helped a lot in the betterment of the environment in that state. In conclusion, some believe that we should cooperate with each other to solve an environmental problem, however, I think that individual efforts can also bring the change in our environment.
It is
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often
argued that to solve the climate issue is an enormous task for the individual countries and
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people
. We
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have to
take the
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help
of each other to solve this problem. This essay completely disagrees with this statement
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because
we
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need
to take responsibility on the individual basis of our
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environment
and plant more
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trees
as much as we can.

To
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begin
with, one of the best ways to
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make
our
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environment
better is that we
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need
to take responsibility for our surroundings. We
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have to
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use
the proper garbage
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system
to throw our waste, and states
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need
to
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make
the proper garbage
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system
and force
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people
to follow that
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system
, and take the action against whom, who does not follow the guidelines of the
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government
. And states should
also
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make
the proper recycling
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system
as well
,
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so
the waste does consume in the betterment of society.
For example
, there is a report that says that if we
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just
take care of our surrounding it will be
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enough
for making the whole
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environment
better.

Secondly
, we
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need
to plant
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trees
as much as we can and spread awareness about the merits of planting
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trees
.
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Trees
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reduce
the temperature of the
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environment
where they planted and
also
provide us with oxygen and fresh
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environment
. They
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prevent
us to become the victim of heatstroke,
thus
we
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need
to aware
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people
about this.
For instance
, after heatstroke hit Pakistan in 2015,
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Current
Prime Minister of Pakistan,
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Imran
Khan, who was at that time, not the Prime Minister, initiated the campaign of 1 billion
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trees
in one of the states of Pakistan that
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helped
a lot in the betterment of the
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environment
in that state.

In conclusion
,
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some
believe that we should cooperate with each other to solve an environmental problem,
however
, I
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think
that individual efforts can
also
bring the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
in our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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Victor Hugo

IELTS essay Governments should spend money on railways ratherthan roads. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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