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The map and charts below indicate land use for different purposes in four different U S regions Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the charts below You should write at least 150 works v.1

The map and charts below indicate land use for different purposes in four different U S regions Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the charts below You should write at least 150 works v. 1
The tourism industry has played an important role in favour of many places. While is possible to claim that it affects their local culture and atmosphere. My view is that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. In this essay, I shall explain my point of view by analysing both sides of an argument. There are several reasons why tourism is very important for any place. One of them is that it is beneficial for the local economy. Whenever, tourists visit any place they spend money on their accommodation, food, and transportation. In this way, they contribute to their local economy. It can also be argued that local businesses have a positive response due to tourism, for example, more employments because of new businesses. Those who argue for the negative side of tourism have a different view and say that is actually not a good thing. firstly, It is claimed that local residents always feel the disturbance as lots of people are visiting their area they are the main source of noise pollution. Then, there are also concerns about their heritage and culture, they believe they are losing their original culture due to other cultures. While there are strong arguments on both sides of the case, My personal view is that tourism has a very positive impact on the local economy and it is one of the main sources of revenue. I would strongly recommend that every country should promote their local tourism so other people can learn more about their culture and show the positive side of their beliefs.
The
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tourism
industry has played an
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important
role in
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favour
of
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many
places. While is possible to claim that it affects their
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local
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culture
and atmosphere. My
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view
is that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. In this essay, I shall
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explain
my point of
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view
by
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analysing
both
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sides
of an argument.

There are several reasons why
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tourism
is
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very
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important
for any place. One of them is that it is beneficial for the
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local
economy. Whenever, tourists visit any place they spend money on their accommodation, food, and transportation. In this way, they contribute to their
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local
economy. It can
also
be argued
that
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local
businesses have a
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positive
response due to
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tourism
,
for example
, more employments
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because
of new businesses.

Those who argue for the
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negative
side of
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tourism
have a
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different
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view
and say
that is
actually not a
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good
thing.
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firstly
, It
is claimed
that
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local
residents always feel the disturbance as lots of
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people
are visiting their area they are the main source of noise pollution. Then, there are
also
concerns about their heritage and
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culture
, they believe they are losing their original
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culture
due to other cultures.

While there are strong arguments on both
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sides
of the case, My personal
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view
is that
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tourism
has a
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very
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positive
impact on the
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local
economy and it is one of the main sources of revenue. I would
strongly
recommend that every country should promote their
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local
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tourism
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so
other
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people
can learn more about their
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culture
and
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show
the
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positive
side of their beliefs.
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23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The map and charts below indicate land use for different purposes in four different U S regions Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the charts below You should write at least 150 works v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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