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Countires are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development. v.1

Countires are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development. v. 1
It is undeniable that students have more freedom. So they can make a better life by themselves. Students are taught to push themselves and make a life batter as compared to work in groups. I presume that the advantages of those precautionary actions would surpass it's drawback to a major extent. My fever is justified further in the ensuing paragraphs with explanations Discussing the merits the foremost one is that students will face the real-world challenge of competition at the early stage. As a result, they become more mature, independent as well as dedicated to their goals. Moreover, children can do competition with their classmates. So, they can improve their knowledge with help of internet and also boost the thinking power. Furthermore, they can improve their self confidence and also learn the how to handle the failure and pressure. As a consequence, it is very help for their future. When they will apply for an interview On the contrary, I shall not overlook it's downside too. To begin with, group study is the best choice for the students. Because they can improve their communication skills and also learn the team work. For instance, cricket and football are most popular sport games. Which require each and every member to work together and give the best performance for the team. Hence, students can apply this method in their academic work. TO conclude, it can be seen that competition promotes self study ability and also increase the confidence and improve the many other things. I believe that self study is the best for the students because this method will give more benefits.
It is undeniable that
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students
have more freedom.
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So
they can
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make
a better life by themselves.
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Students
are taught
to push themselves and
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make
a life batter as compared to work in groups. I presume that the advantages of those precautionary actions would surpass
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it's
drawback to a major extent. My fever
is justified
further
in the ensuing paragraphs with
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explanations


Discussing the merits the foremost one is that
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students
will face the real-world challenge of competition at the early stage.
As a result
, they become more mature, independent
as well
as dedicated to their goals.
Moreover
, children can do competition with their classmates.
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So
, they can
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improve
their knowledge with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of internet and
also
boost the thinking power.
Furthermore
, they can
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improve
their
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self confidence
and
also
learn
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the how
to handle the failure and pressure. As a consequence, it is
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very
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help
for their future. When they will apply for an
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interview


On the contrary
, I shall not overlook
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it's
downside too. To
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begin
with, group study is the best choice for the
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students
.
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Because
they can
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improve
their communication
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skills
and
also
learn the team work.
For instance
, cricket and football are most popular sport games. Which require each and every member to work together and give the best performance for the team.
Hence
,
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students
can apply this method in their academic work.

TO conclude
, it can be
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seen
that competition promotes self study ability and
also
increase the confidence and
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improve
the
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many
other things. I believe that self study is the best for the
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students
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
this method will give more benefits.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Countires are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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