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The man expresses his opinion about the proposal described in the letter. Briefly summarize the proposal. Then state his opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion. v.3

The man expresses his opinion about the proposal described in the letter. Briefly summarize the proposal. Then state his opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion. v. 3
For many years in the education system, the traditional teaching method - teachers make a speech in the auditoriums and learners go to class to study has become a major force of studying. But due to the cutting-edge technology in recent years, many experts have estimated that the above method is becoming old-fashioned. In lieu of, enriching the knowledge is much more popular. In my opinion, I would send my disagreement if someone claimed for the outweigh of online courses and everything should be done online, and here are my explanations. In terms of online courses, nowadays these are becoming more and more general thanks to its great convenience and flexibility which support users in different purposes. Online courses provide us the tremendous flexible schedule which suitable for people whose timetable is too busy to enjoy the face to face classes. Not only it is comfortable for the learners, but also for the tutors as they could make the best use of these technological systems via recording and posting the lectures on their own website or channel. At the same time, students who have missed the class for some poor reasons would be able to listen and recap it later. No one can deny all the mentioned advantages of studying online. But frankly speaking is, I still go for it is better to get ourselves to the traditional classes. When the teachers deliver their lectures, at any point in the time students is allowed to make the questions if anything confused their knowledge. Therefore, their teachers classify particularly so as students get the answers immediately instead of waiting for the replication of the teachers in the mailbox might slow down and interrupt their idea. Consequently, the quality of the lectures is completely enhanced. Viewed from different sides, while online courses are only suitable for those learners who have strong self-discipline and focus ability, conventional classroom is the best selection for everyone without exception as they get the school to manage. Considering the aforementioned, I am still supportive of the conventional studying initiative. Studying via computer and the Internet does not have the necessary impact on giving instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend the lessons directly.
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years in the education system, the traditional teaching method
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teachers
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make
a speech in the auditoriums and learners go to
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class
to study has become a major force of
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studying
.
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But
due to the cutting-edge technology in recent years,
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many
experts have estimated that the above method is becoming
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old
-fashioned. In lieu of, enriching the knowledge is much more popular. In my opinion, I would
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send
my disagreement if someone claimed for
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the outweigh
of
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online
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courses
and everything should
be done
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online
, and here are my explanations.

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In
terms of
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online
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courses
, nowadays these are becoming more and more general thanks to its great convenience and flexibility which support users in
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different
purposes.
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Online
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courses
provide us the tremendous flexible schedule which suitable for
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people
whose timetable is too busy to enjoy the face to face
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classes
. Not
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only
it is comfortable for the learners,
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but
also
for the tutors as they could
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make
the best
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use
of these technological systems via recording and posting the lectures on their
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own
website or channel. At the same time,
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students
who have missed the
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class
for
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some
poor reasons would be able to listen and recap it later.

No one can deny all the mentioned advantages of
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studying
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online
.
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But
frankly
speaking is, I
still
go for it is better to
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get
ourselves to the traditional
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classes
. When the
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teachers
deliver their lectures, at any point in the time
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students
is
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allowed
to
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make
the questions if anything confused their knowledge.
Therefore
, their
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teachers
classify
particularly
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so
as
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students
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get
the answers immediately
instead
of waiting for the replication of the
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teachers
in the mailbox might slow down and interrupt their
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idea
.
Consequently
, the quality of the lectures is completely enhanced. Viewed from
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different
sides, while
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online
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courses
are
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only
suitable for those learners who have strong self-discipline and focus ability, conventional classroom is the best selection for everyone without exception as they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the school to manage.

Considering the aforementioned, I am
still
supportive of the conventional
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studying
initiative.
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Studying
via computer and the Internet does not have the necessary impact on giving instructions to
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students
and actually works to retard the ability of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
to comprehend the lessons
directly
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The man expresses his opinion about the proposal described in the letter. Briefly summarize the proposal. Then state his opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
374 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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